Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In general, television is one of the best entertainment that fills our free time and its programs contain films, advertising and etc. In this regard, Television has viewers of a varied range of ages and it can have different effects on viewers. In my view, television advertising which directed towards aged two to five children should not be allowed. In what follows, I will delve into the most crucial reasons to substantiate my viewpoint.
The first compelling reason corroborating my idea is that children have different families and these families are different in financial situation. These television advertising show many kinds of toys and clothes that are not cheap for some parents, but when young children watch these they start asking their parents to buy them. In order to explain the reason, it is worth mentioning this example. I remember that when I was four, I watch advertising which was about a new doll that could sing and walk. At that time my family was not in a good financial situation, but I was a little kid so I started nagging my parents to buy it. They could not buy it for me and it had a bad effect on me, I became jealous of my friend who had that doll.
Add to this, the second reason is that most of the things that television advertises are not useful for children so their parents do not buy for them and it can make them sad or hate their parents. For instance, a little kid who is five is living in my neighborhood. "They do not understand me and love me", she said. I asked her to explain to me that why she thinks so. I understood that she saw junk food in a television advertising and she asked her parent to buy it, but her mother explained about the disadvantage of junk food. But she could not accept her mother's explanation.
To wrap everything up, I count myself among the proponents of the latter idea. I strongly believe that television advertising directed towards young children should not be allowed because some of these advertising are expensive so some parents can not provide them and some of them are useless for children.
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 126, Rule ID: AND_ETC
Message: Use simply 'etc.'.
...its programs contain films, advertising and etc. In this regard, Television has viewers ...
Line 1, column 353, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...to five children should not be allowed. In what follows, I will delve into the mos...
Line 3, column 149, Rule ID: THIS_NNS
Message: Did you mean 'this television' or 'These televisions'?
Suggestion: This television; These televisions
...s are different in financial situation. These television advertising show many kinds of toys and...
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, second, so, for instance, in general, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 72.0 43.0788530466 167% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1727.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65498652291 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69129064085 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 183.0 212.727598566 86% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.493261455526 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 529.2 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.3641063643 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.9444444444 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6111111111 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.55555555556 5.45110844103 65% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.20211139242 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0634819330882 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0894929022489 0.0737576698707 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.144109590937 0.150856017488 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0688607460492 0.0645574589148 107% => OK
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 68.1 58.1214874552 117% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.7 10.1575268817 86% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.69 10.9000537634 89% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.05 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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