Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities such as famous entertainers and athletes are more important to younger people than the older people to the young.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In this day and age, entertainment is one of the important factors necessary to every human life. People will feel relax and gain back energy when listening to music or watching movies so that celebrities might have a significant contribution to shaping the young generation's thinking. However, I believe that older people who have better thinking to transmit to young people as well as celebrities who are famous and easily express good stories to young people to gain more expreiences equally exert impact on young people.
To begin with, older people who have many experiences in life will easily advise young people when they need it. Agreeable that celebrities might go to many places and try many new things; however, the young generation needs life skills and solves problems effectively. This means that older people's utterances will be more important than celebrities'. For example, most idioms and proverbs are based on old experiences from long times ago, not from nowadays people. Through this example, we can easily see senior advice will not make false because it is summed up over thousands of years.
On the other hand, celebrities who can express advice easily through social media will sometimes give out good advice for people. People will encounter many different stories on social media, including specializing in helping others or bad deeds are recorded. Celebrities will share these stories to help young generations know and avoid similar stories. Take me, for instance; I follow many artists in my city on Instagram; once a day, I saw a story about a gang of thieves who just robbed the bank. Thanks to that story, I knew that information and stop went to that bank. I will not know what was happening If I went to that bank at that time.
All things considered, older people's advice will always be good advice for every young people. Celebs will be a motive technique which shares story or old people advice for young people as the fastest way due to nowadays technology development.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, so, well, for example, for instance, as well as, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1675.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 337.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9703264095 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28457229495 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56039242407 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.560830860534 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 523.8 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.6905654097 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 104.6875 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0625 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.1875 5.45110844103 114% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.200257421083 0.236089414692 85% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0716208262975 0.076458572812 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0714692818808 0.0737576698707 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.138409305731 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0617977158467 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.55 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.38 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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