Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, it is common to see younger people purchasing products advertised by celebrities or attending music concerts hosted by their favourite singers. Therefore, I agree that celebrities have more influence on younger people.
First of all, younger people are more likely turn to celebrities for entertainment because of the similarities in age and interest. The entertainers, such as a movie star or singer, are usually young and attractive. To the youth, they represent the fashion. It is easy for the young people to follow what the entertainers wear, how they act and follow their social media pages. For example, when I was young, I see Michael Jack as an idol. I used to dress a black jacket and wear a black hat like him. I even bought every album he released.
On contrary, older people are usually compact with jobs, personal lives and households. They don’t have enough time to follow famous entertainers or athletes. As we all know modern society is quite competitive. To hold their position at work, the elders have to improve themselves through endless effort. Beside that, family issues, such as children’s education, mortgage and all kind of bills, etc also occupy large part of their lives.
In summary, I am fully convinced that younger people can be easily impacted by opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 160, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...follow famous entertainers or athletes. As we all know modern society is quite com...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, so, therefore, for example, in summary, kind of, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 25.0 52.1666666667 48% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1148.0 1977.66487455 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 224.0 407.700716846 55% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.125 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.86867284054 4.48103885553 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83561926343 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 146.0 212.727598566 69% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.651785714286 0.524837075471 124% => OK
syllable_count: 357.3 618.680645161 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.8815521486 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.5333333333 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.9333333333 20.6045352989 72% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.53333333333 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.279671303434 0.236089414692 118% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0796395619648 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0709395022879 0.0737576698707 96% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.163016964363 0.150856017488 108% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.026610251839 0.0645574589148 41% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.88 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
More content wanted.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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