Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Recently, there has been a ton of debate on whether opinions of celebrities are more important to younger people than the older people. Personally, I am of the opinion that opinions of celebrities have more impact on younger people. I think of this way because of two reasons, which I will explore in this essay.
First of all, children are more likely to be influenced by perspectives of celebrities. Obviously, since younger people have spent most of their life at school, they do not have enough experience in real word and lack the ability of critical thinking. Therefore, they have the tendency to follow the fashion, which is usually defined by famous people, while older people who have been practiced in the society for a long time, usually make decisions based on their own thoughts. This is best demonstrated by a study conducted by Peking university which is a top ranked institution in China. The result shows that more than half of younger people in the city believes that they must follow and support their idols without judgement. As we can see, how easily children can be impacted by opinions they received.
Secondly, young children get the information from the Internet far more than the old generation. To be more specific, nowadays the words said by celebrities are usually transmitted via Internet instead of newspapers, which means young people have more chance to access to the quotations of the celebrities and get affected by them. Meanwhile, virus videos created plenty of stars online and the group targets of these videos are the young people. Not to mention that old generation may not even know how to know these new app such as Tik Tok.
In conclusion, I am fully convinced that younger people are prone to be influenced by opinions of celebrities. This is because children do not have enough experience to prevent being affected by others and because they received far more opinions of celebrities than the elders.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, i think, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 5.0 13.8261648746 36% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 25.0 43.0788530466 58% => OK
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1629.0 1977.66487455 82% => OK
No of words: 329.0 407.700716846 81% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.95136778116 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.25891501996 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67901018201 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 170.0 212.727598566 80% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.516717325228 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 510.3 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.8369452759 48.9658058833 98% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.6 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.9333333333 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.73333333333 5.45110844103 124% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.274550679714 0.236089414692 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0950523116968 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0820179666271 0.0737576698707 111% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.177901821746 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0492449031499 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.43 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.18 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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