It is clearly understood that in such a sophisticated world, famous people such as acters, entertrainment and athletes are very important for scoiaty, because they can be very effective on people and in some case they can make some changes in everybodys life. Some people are inclined toward the opinion that celebrities are more important than older people to younger people, and they are able to make an effect on younger people, whereas others hold exactly the opposite perspective. As far as I am concerned, the opinions of famous people can be very effective in younger people, because they can conecte to younger people in a modern ways. In the subsequent paregraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first significant point to be mentioned is that young pepole like celebrities and followe them in scosial media, they whach famous people lives and want to live like them, or be sucsesful like them, so they repedet some active of them and in this circomstances famous people can be very effectiv in younger people life. Also, young people do not like to older people advise them, and refutes they opinion in most of the situation. In addaition, younger people see celebrities as a pattern for they lives, so the opoinion of famous people are very impresive to younger people and they should manage their behavior. For instans, famous people such as acters should think about what they say or what they do, because younger people are monitor them in every sitoation and they have to be a good pattern for future generation.
Anoter reason, which should be taken into consideration, is that young people feels close to celebrities, especialy whit young celebrities, because they seen echother in the same age and follow them in everything. On the other hand, the young people do not feel close to older people, because they are from different genearation, and most of the time young people have this feeling that older people such as they parents do not understand them in some sitoation, so this is very normeal for them to followe celebritoes and take their opinion seriesly. Take my personal experience as a compeling example; I remembered when I was younger, I followed some celebrities in social made and liked them very mouch, on that time my parents wanted for me to became a doctor in my perfeshonal life, but I was absesd with some acter and I want to become actores, exactly like him, I chose him as my pattern and my parents opinion were not important for me, at last I chose art in university, and became an actores, so it was not bad for me to listen to my hero in my personal life.
In conclusion, if one weighs the merits and demerits of the aforementioned statement, one soon realizes that the effect of celebrities on society, especially on younger people are deniable, so this is a hiogh responsibilty for celebrities to be carefull about what they say and what they do, because their opinion are very important to young people.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'way'?
Suggestion: way
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Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'live'
Suggestion: live
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Message: The pronoun 'they' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'parent'
Suggestion: parent
... feeling that older people such as they parents do not understand them in some sitoatio...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, whereas, in conclusion, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2463.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 512.0 407.700716846 126% => OK
Chars per words: 4.810546875 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.75682846001 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68105305835 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.412109375 0.524837075471 79% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 803.7 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 12.0 20.6003584229 58% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 42.0 20.1344086022 209% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 115.64129765 48.9658058833 236% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 205.25 100.406767564 204% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 42.6666666667 20.6045352989 207% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 6.33333333333 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.336114050232 0.236089414692 142% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.167311266678 0.076458572812 219% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0779763183212 0.0737576698707 106% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.230282312258 0.150856017488 153% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0596515318665 0.0645574589148 92% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 22.6 11.7677419355 192% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 28.85 58.1214874552 50% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 19.7 10.1575268817 194% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.51 10.9000537634 106% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.8 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.8 10.0537634409 187% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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