Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In modern generation, the famouse people are in first level for young people. Their way can be the way young generation will follow, because these celebraties are one big part of their entertaoment in day long. On the other hand, old generation do not care about this things that much; Thus, We can see young people gibe more attention than older people. I will explain my reasons in following paragraph.
The first and most important thing is, The celebratie's life style and beaviors are open to publice. There for young people, especially, teenagers are really sensetive about these topics and they want to be like them, dress like them, behave like them or speak like them. Inhence, famous artists or athletes and other celebrities are important for them.
the second reason is that these people are successful in peoples eyes. Actually, mostly, in young peoples eyes. They are famouce and every body know them and they are rich, as well. In consider, young people, who want to find their ways, they just want to be something good like the persone that their admire. First person, most of the time is a celebrity, THerefore these group of society are more important for youngs.
Another point that I really want to mention is, If we look from other side of the road, We can see in all societies young generation are more sensetive than old ones. why it is like this?! As a young person, I think people in my age or in my generation, they don't finde they life yet. Thus, they just imagine how it could be if I was like him/ her. We are imagine and we just follow the person and the person going to be important for us and we will never know how! Until we make our own life perfectly. Until that they we support the celebrities and following them but abruptly we have our own bussiness and life and we are in middle age, thus, those people aren't important for us any more.
in conclusion, sensetive personallity of young people and have not a suitable and stable life can be a reason for pay attention to celebrities than older generation.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, hence, if, look, really, second, so, therefore, thus, well, i think, in conclusion, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1680.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 365.0 407.700716846 90% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.60273972603 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.37092360658 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.38538113518 2.67179642975 89% => OK
Unique words: 173.0 212.727598566 81% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.47397260274 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 532.8 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.4812694663 48.9658058833 91% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.3333333333 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.2777777778 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.83333333333 5.45110844103 125% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.194747173321 0.236089414692 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0792794836823 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0533627628043 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.124595756602 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0311029725664 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.4 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.4 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.83 8.01818996416 85% => OK
difficult_words: 51.0 86.8835125448 59% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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