It is clearly understood that in such a sopisticated world, effects of movies and television program on people, espeasialy younger people is a lot, the way that younger people behave is a very important issue in scoiaty and the government shoud give enough attantin in that issue. Some people have inclined toward that opinion that movies and television programs have a bad effects than positive effects on younger people, whereas others hold exactly the opposite perspective. As far as I am concerned, with developing of technology and internet no one can forbid younger people to watch movies and television so they should accept this fact and try to make a good material for younger people. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first significant point to be mentioned is that younger people need to feel more independent, also they should have this opertunity to choose what they want, and have a choice to watch different movies and different chanels is a sample of that, also with developing of technology and internet they have access to all the material, and different movies. So forbid young people to do not watch bad programs is not a solosion. The government in scoiaty, and parents in family play a key roal in this circumstances, the government should make positive material for television and spending more monay to produse good movie; hence, the amount of positive material increas and younger people prefer to watch them. In addition, the parents roul is very effective on their children, they should try to rise them proprly, and teach them to recognize good material and avoid from harmful movies or television show.
Another reason, which should be taken into consideration, is that younger people naturally want know more and explore more information from the world, so forbid them from something like specific movie or television program, make them much interested about that material, and this is not a effective way to protacte them from harmful programs and movies. The scoiety should believe them more that before and give them right to make choice for themselves, and in this case society should allow younger people to recognize good material and be more responsible about their choice. Take my personal experience as a compelling example; when I was in high school my parents allow me to watch all the channels in television, but before that they talk to me and explain to me about some programs on TV, so they want to gave me right to chose for myselfe, at the beginning I was so curas about that shows, so one they I watch them, and I do not like that programs at all, because I grown up in that way to understand the bad things, after that I never want to watch that movies or programs, and I believe that my parent choice was execelent because they knew me very well.
In counclusion, if one weighs the merits and demerots of the aforementioned statement, one soon realizes that sociaty and parents could not avoid younger people from some movies and televison, but they should have a plan for this maters. The government should pay more attention to this mater, and parent should grow up their children more better than ever. If they try to do their best, the future of scoiaty would be in a good place.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, so, well, whereas, in addition
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 33.0 13.8261648746 239% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 68.0 43.0788530466 158% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2723.0 1977.66487455 138% => OK
No of words: 563.0 407.700716846 138% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.83658969805 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87110059796 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60036251928 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.417406749556 0.524837075471 80% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 842.4 618.680645161 136% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 9.0 3.08781362007 291% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 11.0 1.86738351254 589% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 40.0 20.1344086022 199% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 133.496082645 48.9658058833 273% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 194.5 100.406767564 194% => OK
Words per sentence: 40.2142857143 20.6045352989 195% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.21428571429 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.203967713228 0.236089414692 86% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0875164252906 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0607960706221 0.0737576698707 82% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.143047278876 0.150856017488 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0521265551202 0.0645574589148 81% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 21.5 11.7677419355 183% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 39.34 58.1214874552 68% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 17.7 10.1575268817 174% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.68 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 91.0 86.8835125448 105% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 18.0 10.0537634409 179% => OK
text_standard: 18.0 10.247311828 176% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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