Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The opinions of celebrities, such as famous entertainers and athletes, are more important to younger people than they are to older people.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I agree that the opinions of celebrities are more important to younger people than to older people. In modern society, the opinions of celebrities can be easily heard from TV programs and the internet. However, those opinions don’t affect people equally. In fact, young men are the main audience of the celebrities for several reasons which I will explain as following.
First of all, the topics which celebrities talk about usually are interesting for younger generation, but are less attractive to elder people. For example, according to a survey conducted by the Youtube, the famous youtubers with the most subscribers are people who talk about fashion or pop music, and people who make fun videos with strong, unique personal style. From my personal experience, while I enjoy watching those videos, my parents and grandparent have no interest in watching them at all. Instead, they pay attention to political or economy issues that few celebrities discuss. In other words, young people have more common interests with celebrities so they are impacted more by the words of the celebrities.
In addition, young people tend to accept the opinions of the celebrities because they deem famous people successful and want to become as successful as them. However, old people are more experienced and have their own judgement much more than young people do. They probably don’t recognize a person as successful simply because he/she is famous. Old people put more emphasis on the motivation and reasoning behind the words, and analyze those words from a more comprehensive perspective. As a result, the words of the celebrities do not influence old people as easily as they do to the young men.
Last but not least, young people have much exposure to the opinions of the celebrities than old men do, so they are impacted by the opinions more. To be more specific, when a celebrity posts his opinion online, it would be reported by other social networks again and again. Since young people tend to follow many social networks at the same time, they would read the similar reporting for many times. That is, the message would be reinforced in their brain and it is possible that eventually the message affects their thoughts unconsciously. However, most of the old people are not heavy users of the internet, so they are not exposed to those similar messages that much and are much less affected by them.
All in all, I believe that the opinions of celebrities have more impacts on young people than on older people, because the topics they discuss induce the interest of young people. Furthermore, young people think famous people are successful people so they believe in what the celebrities said. Also, because of repeated exposure to the message from the celebrities, young man could be impacted unconsciously.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, so, while, for example, in addition, in fact, as a result, first of all, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2367.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 466.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07939914163 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67327631758 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.44635193133 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 742.5 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.2696224781 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.590909091 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1818181818 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95454545455 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.253919857289 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0945592815293 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0856672195766 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.166153231366 0.150856017488 110% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0338177018566 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.18 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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