Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In order to become financially responsible adults, children should learn to manage their own money at young age. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Being an independant and successfull adult reauires progressing in many aspects of life. one of the most important aspects an adult should bacame advanced in, is becoming financially responsible. In my point of view, the financially managing skills which a person gain during young age, are essential for prosperity of his/her future, mainly for the following reasons.
First and foremost, becoming an adult is not task happening in one night. it needs a period of training time to be expert in each aspect of adolesence. Consider a boy who never had the chance to manage his own money and his family had always supported him financially. do we expect this boy to become independant when he reaches 18? he will not know how to gain money and he will not have any priority to spend his money on. Although if he had the chance earlier to work and gain money by himself, manage his money and save money for what he wants the story would completely change.
In the other hand, when a person have the ability to manage his/her money, self-confidence will come along because he/she had accomplished a significant task needed to become an independant adult.
Moreover, dependancy on family is quite irritating for almost every teenager. they rush so as to be independant and have the complete control of their lives. money is the biggest problem they will face during this procedure. so they have to learn how to manage their limited money and pass along many things they want to have but can not afford. it will lead them to have a priority list in which they should provide their basic necessities first. so sooner they learn these skills, will be independant sooner.
Taking into account all these reasons, families should help their children trough the procedure of becoming an adult and make them learn financial skills, even if they do not want to. because in future, there may be no parents to support them and they will have to face all the problems on their own. they will not succeed unless they had developed their basic living skills before.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, may, moreover, so, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1725.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 354.0 407.700716846 87% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.87288135593 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.33761313653 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51799517917 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 186.0 212.727598566 87% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.525423728814 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 529.2 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.6918696406 48.9658058833 83% => OK
Chars per sentence: 90.7894736842 100.406767564 90% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6315789474 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.10526315789 5.45110844103 39% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 13.0 5.5376344086 235% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.168274491325 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0542863307887 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0381284541483 0.0737576698707 52% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0983477580498 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0275008121699 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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