Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Parents today are more involved in their children's education than parents were in the past.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is critically important that parents provide a proper situation for their children success. Personally, I believe parent used to contribute to their children education far less than today. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, education was not as important as todays many years ago. Before the explosion of technology, jobs was based on the skills, so most people were trying to teach their children how to make money by working instead of persisting on their education. In fact a lot of parents were willing their children continue their own career, so children as same as their parents, who most of them did not attend to any academic courses, did not need to look at education seriously. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. My grandfather did not know where my father's school is, and the most important thing to my grandpa was the work that my father must have done after his school, but my father during my education have been talking about my lessons and even my teachers to me almost every day.
Furthermore, today’s academic climate is competitive far more than the past, so parents play a crucial role in this circumstances. If someone want to study a popular major in the university, he will have to try hard by studying plenty of books and references to compete their rivals. For instance, there is a big entrance exam for universities In the Iran named konkour. The students allocate at least the last year of their high school to prepare for this exam. If parents do not support their children during this period, they will give up and will never go to the university. Nowadays, having academic education is something necessary, not only for landing a decent job, but also for having respect among people. Parents want their children have all the good thing and experience an amazing life, so the only way in this field is help the student to attend more strictly to their lessons.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that parents are more involved in their children's education rather than before. This is because jobs was skill-based in the past and there was a minor require for education, and the educational climate was not as much competitive as todays in those days.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'these'?
Suggestion: these
...past, so parents play a crucial role in this circumstances. If someone want to study...
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Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'wants'.
Suggestion: wants
... role in this circumstances. If someone want to study a popular major in the univers...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, if, look, so, as to, at least, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, talking about, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1894.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80710659898 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62912312125 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548223350254 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.8617299407 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 111.411764706 100.406767564 111% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.1764705882 20.6045352989 112% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.58823529412 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265628138293 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.101726836577 0.076458572812 133% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0922266373516 0.0737576698707 125% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186500104225 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0452295347286 0.0645574589148 70% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.91 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.06 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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