Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Identifying what type of career would lead to a successful future is imperative to us, since choosing a right career can let us work shorter time to earn certain amount of money compare with others. With the help of technology, people today can get information of a job way easier than before. Thus, I disagree with the statement that it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure and successful future, for the following reasons.
First of all, people now can easily access to different information through the Internet, so they can tell which job has better salary and benefit without spending considerable time in doing research. For example, there are many websites, such as glassdoor, that provide information about different jobs. So if we want to know whether the job that we about to apply pays well or includes attractive benefits, we can simply type the position into the search bar, and let the computer do the rest of work for us. Moreover, some websites even include reviews from people who are working or used to work in that position, which provides us more accurate information about it.
Furthermore, due to the flourishing of technological industries, people today do not guess which industry that pays better, since technology is always the one that pays highest salaries. In that way, distinguishing salary has turned from position level to industrial level, which is way easier for us to spot the promise career. For instance, Taiwan. In Taiwan, the salary gap between industries is fairly wide now. A beginner level of software engineer position pays almost two times more than people who work in the bank. Therefore, people today do not need to calculate the difference still can tell what type of career would lead to a successful future.
In conclusion, although we should not evaluate a career should not merely depend on it salary, since the salary difference is too significant, I believe no matter how good is the benefits of a job, still cannot surpass the salary gaps.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 165, Rule ID: THE_SUPERLATIVE[2]
Message: A determiner is probably missing here: 'pays the highest'.
Suggestion: pays the highest
...since technology is always the one that pays highest salaries. In that way, distinguishing s...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, furthermore, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, thus, well, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 22.0 43.0788530466 51% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1694.0 1977.66487455 86% => OK
No of words: 345.0 407.700716846 85% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.91014492754 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.3097767484 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6570336406 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.550724637681 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 533.7 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 58.4113229867 48.9658058833 119% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.0 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.6428571429 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.35714285714 5.45110844103 172% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.229392279913 0.236089414692 97% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0868195518755 0.076458572812 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.133399765445 0.0737576698707 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148505720159 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.151197858218 0.0645574589148 234% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.49 10.9000537634 105% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.44 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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