Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
When any given company wants to increase the sales number of certain products, they would usually use advertisement to increase the exposure for them. Since the advertisement will be seen by a large number of potential customers, it is understandable that they make their products more attractive than they really are, otherwise, the companies may not be able to receive the effects that they expected. Hence, I agree with the statement that most advertisements make products seem much better than they really are.
To begin with, one of the important goals of advertisement is to create an illusion that the product is excellent. Only when the potential customers think that the product worths its price, that they have the motivation that is strong enough to have a desire to understand the product. For example, I remember that I have seen a laptop advertisement from GIGABYTE before. At that time I did not need a new laptop, yet when I saw the advertisement that states their laptop has outstanding performance, it did raise my interest. Though in the end, I did not buy that laptop, it did make me spend hours to understand their product.
Furthermore, a good advertisement can also help the company establish a good reputation. In this way, no matter how the quality of the products is, people will still have confidence in the company. It may sound impossible, but this is a real story that happened in my family. My dad used to buy a television from Samsung, however, the television did not last that long in my house. I remember after five months that we had the new television, the speakers of it were broken. And my dad spent a considerable amount of time trying to fix this problem, but the speakers would always have a problem within few months. In the end, my dad said he would never buy any product from Samsung. And a few years later, he saw an advertisement for a laundry machine from Samsung, despite he had suffered from Samsung's product, he still gave it a try again.
In conclusion, advertisement plays an imperative role in promoting the product and establishing the company's appearance. Therefore, if the advertisement only makes the product be the same as it is in real life. Companies may never be able to achieve the goal that they want to achieve.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, really, so, still, therefore, for example, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1891.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.79949238579 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.87999499149 2.67179642975 108% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.505076142132 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 594.0 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.9420791377 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 99.5263157895 100.406767564 99% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7368421053 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.31578947368 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.219630131911 0.236089414692 93% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0750422089305 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116041742549 0.0737576698707 157% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.148244961634 0.150856017488 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.10923893383 0.0645574589148 169% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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