Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Decision-making is considered to be a huge challenge for many teenagers. Some of them rely on their parents when they make their choices. However, I think young people today are more independent in making a decision than they were in the past.
To begin with, the advent of technology has a direct influence on many young lives. Today, they can travel using many technological vehicles such as cars and planes. As a result, when these young teens travel alone or with friends, they become independent. For example, when I was in intermediate school, my friend Ali had a fancy car because his family was rich. Therefore, whenever we had a school break, we used to travel together for more than seven days. During our journey, we used to depend on ourselves in cooking the food and cleaning the house. Thus, I learned all these skills of independence from multiple friendship trips. On the other hand, young people before did not have any source of technology. Hence, they lived most of the time with their parents; and they depended on them to accomplish their tasks.
Adding to the previous point, young people today have huge opportunities to get a scholarship and study abroad. They will have to go to another country and live alone for at least five years. A good example of this situation is my cousin Wael. Before he started his educational path, he lived with his parent. At these years, he was a spoiled boy because his parent tended to give him everything he wanted such as Play Station and many video games. On the other side, when Wael got the scholarship and went to France, he started to depend on himself. At the first year, he faced some difficulties like homesickness, but after that, life over there forced him to be an independent person.
All in all, I strongly believe that teenagers today depend mostly on themselves than they were in the old days. This is not only because of the arrival of technology, but also the increase in the number of scholarships around the world.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, however, if, so, therefore, thus, at least, for example, i think, such as, as a result, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1650.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 349.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.72779369628 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60625307085 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.581661891117 0.524837075471 111% => OK
syllable_count: 515.7 618.680645161 83% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 22.6266152754 48.9658058833 46% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.5714285714 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.619047619 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.90476190476 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.247367518573 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.072421839714 0.076458572812 95% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0724765010461 0.0737576698707 98% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.161155527043 0.150856017488 107% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.12876271729 0.0645574589148 199% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.86 10.9000537634 90% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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