Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It has been said that if you want to serve your country, start helping with their community works. Nowadays, many people see that young individuals should have time to support their community. As far as I am concerned, however, I believe that currently, young people do not have the time, money, effort to help their community.
Recently, people do not have the time for community work as compared with the past. In old days, only men were always responsible for finding a job and work to support their families. Although women were free of outdoor works, so they can help their community because they had time and were not busy with jobs. On the other hand, now, both men and women work and have jobs, and both of them do not have the time to support their community as well.
Today, supporting the family has become more difficult and one of the top priorities than supporting the community. Due to the increase in living expenses, many parents need to work extra time to earn extra money to support their kids. Parents needed at least a second job to cover for school tuitions for their children. In contrary, before the 2000s’, life was not as expensive as today. People used to support their kids with one job only and they did not have to work for an extra job. Therefore, the time that parent have would be spent on another job rather than on volunteering with the community work.
Some people might argue that with the development of technology such as smartphones, people should have time to support their communities. That is true to some point, yet, not every work can be done throw technology. For instance, people can not support to build community building through the phone, they need to do physical work instead. Indeed, community services need time, money and physical effort for sure.
In conclusion, I strongly think that people should do not have the capability of supporting their community. I think about in this way because community work requires time, money and effort, and people nowadays, do not have those requirements.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, second, so, therefore, well, as to, at least, for instance, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 26.0 43.0788530466 60% => OK
Preposition: 36.0 52.1666666667 69% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1486.0 1977.66487455 75% => OK
No of words: 311.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77813504823 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.40562610173 2.67179642975 90% => OK
Unique words: 157.0 212.727598566 74% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.504823151125 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 450.9 618.680645161 73% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 9.59856630824 42% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 20.7464508992 48.9658058833 42% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 87.4117647059 100.406767564 87% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2941176471 20.6045352989 89% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.82352941176 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.258964329828 0.236089414692 110% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0969846472957 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0650800809435 0.0737576698707 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.185431913951 0.150856017488 123% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0621112706141 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 70.13 58.1214874552 121% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.9 10.1575268817 78% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.86 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 46.0 86.8835125448 53% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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