Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
time is an essential part of our life. Nowadays, by developing cities and increasing the expense all people, especially young individuals, have to try harder to work, and their time is very limited to take part another voluntary task. Some people believe that young citizens should assist their communities if even they do not have enough time, however others hold the opposite view. In my opinion, everyone do not have sufficient time to help social work for two noticeable reasons.
The main reason is that the majority of individual's office where they work is too far from their home that lead to waste their free time. In other words, by epanding cities people have to allocate the most valube time for arriving at their work place. Unfortunately, when everyone use public trasportation such as subway or bus, they should wait several minute or even hours to arrive at special station. therefore, person really do not have extra time to take part charity task for their society. For example, I was student four years ago, and I went to my university in tehran where was big and extensive city in Iran. my home, where located in downtown, was too far from university, where placed in uptown. I had to take taxi from my neighberhood to subway, and then took train to arrive at university that took my time about five hours. In addition, this tedious courses became me too much tired. therefore, I did not have extra time even taking rest for a while. As you can see, limited time do not allow young people to assist volunteer work.
The another reason is that increasing the expense of life limit young individual's time to give hand in society. Sadly, in undevelpment countries there are not accurate management that lead to rise price severely. So, these high-costly life cause young individuals to work all the time in order to subsist under this pressure. Obviously, they do no have extra time to help their community. For instance, a few years ago I had to work all the time to cover my expense in tehran city. In fact, all young individuals had no other choise and should work even their extra time because my city had no correct and literary managemt. Everyday, government enacted new law like increasing the price of fuels in order to comensate its budget which lead to I worked several jobs all day. Consequently, doing these jobs took all my time. this experience taught me that young people can not give their time to assist social activities because of their preoccupation.
In conclusion, although helping to community is valuable in every culture, young individuals do not devote their time to it due to the fact not only their office is too far from their home but also they have to work several jobs. if people have enough time, it is better to take rest instead of helping their society.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, however, if, really, so, then, therefore, while, as to, for example, for instance, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, in my opinion, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2335.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 489.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77505112474 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70248278971 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5031293014 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 234.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.478527607362 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 759.6 618.680645161 123% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.5130509158 48.9658058833 89% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.4 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.56 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.32 5.45110844103 134% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 10.0 4.88709677419 205% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.235033025107 0.236089414692 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0833222118007 0.076458572812 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0684260177214 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179753654255 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0287422531389 0.0645574589148 45% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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