Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Having a good interaction with society and giving service to it are young generation's vitally important tasks. Yet there remain some disagreement as to whether the society benefits from youngsters. Although, nowadays it is said that the youth are spending a huge part of their time in order to serve society and the community is being flourished by young people. I strongly believe that younger generation should be more dedicated for cutting their time and put more efforts to aid their society. In the following paragraphs, I will elaborate my reasons.
First, today’s complex world has obliged younger generation to put themselves first in their life and do not devote their time on doing even meager deed for their community. Good interaction between the youth and the society will have fostered the bond between community members; as a result, more appropriate and satisfying society individuals will have to live. However, almost everyone already knows the fact that aiding the society is must-have essential task, less and less youngsters are contributing in that as the pace of life increases. That is to say, most of our young generation is attracted by modern world’s ornate decorations; therefore, they are not able to think about community, even if they do, time does not permit. Indulging in, for example, the internet, fascinating materials or social media will undoubtedly squander our teenagers’ time and hold back them for serving to society. Of course, it is not the whole story.
Second, the youth do not allocate time for give a service to their society because community and the population are not their priority. Today’s educated teenagers think that everything is deserved for them and the egoism associated with this thought will be a beacon to deviate them from the main route. Not only is this kind of belief deleterious for the individuals, but it also detrimental for the community at large. With this point in mind, in order to rescue the population and society from unfavorable opinions, it is crucial to disabuse our youngsters and make them cautious about their beliefs.
To sum up, it is easy to conclude that teenagers do not allocate adequate moment in favor of their people and community owing to indulging themselves in modern life’s facilities and not placing the society in their priority.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 147, Rule ID: WHETHER[6]
Message: Can you shorten this phrase to just 'whether', or rephrase the sentence to avoid "as to"?
Suggestion: whether
...sks. Yet there remain some disagreement as to whether the society benefits from youngsters. A...
^^^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...agraphs, I will elaborate my reasons. First, today's complex world has ob...
^^^^
Line 5, column 480, Rule ID: FEWER_LESS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'fewer'? The noun youngsters is countable.
Suggestion: fewer
...y is must-have essential task, less and less youngsters are contributing in that as ...
^^^^
Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...Of course, it is not the whole story. Second, the youth do not allocate time f...
^^^^
Line 11, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...ke them cautious about their beliefs. To sum up, it is easy to conclude that t...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, second, so, therefore, as to, for example, kind of, of course, as a result, to sum up, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1986.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 383.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.18537859008 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.42384287591 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83380645039 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.519582245431 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 622.8 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.326733714 48.9658058833 105% => OK
Chars per sentence: 124.125 100.406767564 124% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.9375 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.25 5.45110844103 151% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.166522686785 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0582507252512 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.056791366396 0.0737576698707 77% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112409632185 0.150856017488 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0150280334074 0.0645574589148 23% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.0 11.7677419355 127% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.13 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.12 10.9000537634 120% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
---------------------
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.