Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Young people nowadays do not give enough time to helping their communities. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People's community has significant role in their life. It is where people spend most of their life time and contact with others. Each of human has responsibility in making the society better place in each aspects. Some people believe that young citizens don't spend part of their time in helping community, whereas some others hold an opposite attitude. In my view, plenty of community's progress results from youngers cooperation for two remarkable reasons.
The main reason is that juveniles help society by getting involve in social organizations. In today's world each community is expanding because of growing population which provides the environment with great number of problems. Therefore, for preserving our community from these problems we need well-educated persons with a lot of energy to alert others. Younger people who have vast knowledge in various field could convenience careless citizens easily. For example, I live in Urmia where has the biggest salty lake in our country. Unfortunately, some climate change and human activities expose the lake and its animal species in danger. As I study environmental science in university, my friends and I decided to initiate organization in order to survive the lake. Each day, we eagerly spent lots of time in both gathering information and analyzing novel methods. Although our professor helped us a lot, we could provide government with vast variety of creative methods to deal with problem. As you see, undeniably, younger people try hard to assist their society and flourish it.
Second, younger people progress community by informing citizens through internet. Technology is improving with high speed and the traditional means of communications and conveying news become inefficient. So, nowadays, people mostly prefer to get their data about different events from internet. As new generations are more familiar with novel technics, they play a significant role in dedicating their time and effort for improving this part of community. For instance, statistics show that the society’s juveniles spent 4 hours in average to get the other people aware of information which is useful for enhancing the morality and make open-minded citizens in community. Researcher's investigation demonstrated that since the younger people's attempt through net is intangible for others, they taught new generations didn't get involve in progress of society. Astoundingly, adults had greater part in social activities because not only had better information about new means of communication, but also had more interest in sharing their knowledge. There are even times when today's generation sacrifice their desires and wants and totally ignore them just to be helpful to their society. If it was not for the help of young generation, the world would have not changed in such a swift pace.
In conclusion, I do believe that youngers spend part of their time in enhancing society level. Not only are they active in social organizations, but they also use their knowledge in technology to inform people. I think adults should pay more attention to their community in each country.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, second, so, therefore, well, whereas, for example, for instance, i think, in conclusion, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 71.0 52.1666666667 136% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2650.0 1977.66487455 134% => OK
No of words: 492.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.38617886179 4.8611393121 111% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70967865282 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90253225124 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 270.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.548780487805 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 832.5 618.680645161 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 27.0 20.6003584229 131% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.0723086491 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.1481481481 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2222222222 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.22222222222 5.45110844103 77% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178819814541 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0505084121316 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0418309845215 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119355519579 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0158732782017 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.75 58.1214874552 77% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.98 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.99 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 139.0 86.8835125448 160% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 85.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.5 Out of 30
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