Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It is generally agreed today that making decisions have a crucial role in our life. Some people believe that we should depend on our parents to make a decision. On the other hand, others argue that young people are able to make decisions by themselves. I strongly agree with the former one. In what follows, I elaborate on my viewpoint.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that depending on parents to make decision lower the risk of decision. We have many problems during our life which our parents experience them. They have dealt with these problems and know which solution is appropriate for us. They actually pave the way that we can walk with few problems. They have a broader horizon which can help us to make a better decision. Take a personal experience as an example; when I finished high school, I was in a dilemma to choose my university major. I was really into art, yet there were not perfect jobs opportunity for artists in my country. On the other hand, engineering majors were flourishing in my country and had a wide variety of job position in every company. I consult with my father, and he told me about his job that was uninteresting for him. He said to me that you would spend lots of your life doing your future career. So, you should choose your university major depend on your interest. Consequently, I have studied music at the university, and I am a musician that can work independently while enjoying my work. Had I not taken that advice from my father, I would have chosen an engineering major; therefore, I had a frustrating job like my father.
Another equally noteworthy in corroborating my stance is that making a decision by the help of parents relieve our tension, and makes our to do our best. Therefore, we can take the best result in our way. To exemplify, I always have stress when I want to receive a new decision in my life. In this situation, I go to my parent's home and talk to him about my problem. My tension is relieved by their talking and helps.
In brief, all the aforementioned reasons one soon realize that young people should depend on their parents to make their decision. It is highly recommended that a survey be conducted to compare the succeeding of those decisions of people which they make alone with those which make by their parent’s help.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 336, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
...way that we can walk with few problems. They have a broader horizon which can help u...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, consequently, first, if, really, so, therefore, while, in brief, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 82.0 43.0788530466 190% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1908.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 413.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.61985472155 4.8611393121 95% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50803742585 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67853086794 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513317191283 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 614.7 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 20.0 9.59856630824 208% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 34.7472243496 48.9658058833 71% => OK
Chars per sentence: 76.32 100.406767564 76% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.52 20.6045352989 80% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.68 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.276320861615 0.236089414692 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0800584442225 0.076458572812 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.083878639409 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218644846513 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.107817470648 0.0645574589148 167% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.6 11.7677419355 73% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.22 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.5 10.002688172 55% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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