Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decision for them, today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
To my way of thinking, nowadays parents have a more important role to make decisions for their young children because not only are parents more knowledgeable, but also they pay more attention to their youths.
The first reason which should be stated here is that today parents are more aware than past. In the past, most of the people were not educated, so they did not have enough information to guide their children. Apart from that, because of stronger media applications people are more aware of the advantages and disadvantages of any decision. For example, my grandmother was not educated, so when my mother wanted to go to the university, she could not perceive any help from her mother because she was not experienced. Therefore, my mother just went to the university according to what she thought she liked, so she studied economic. After she went to the university, she found that this major has a lot of differences with what she thought, so she got disappointed, yet when I wanted to choose my field of study, I decided to study geometrics at the university, and my parents had made me conscious about the lessons which I should learn, so I realized this major was not my favorite, so I studied Finance, and then I was satisfied. It is clear, people are more aware than past, so actually in the past people were unable to help their children in important situations.
Another reason worth discussing here is that nowadays parents are more careful about their children. Some people believe that in the past parents had more time to spend with their children, so they could pay more attention to them; however, I think just having more time cause not to pay more attention. For example, today in any family parents just breed one or two children, even though in the past people at least had four or five children. Then, it is true that they had more time, yet this time should be allocated to more children. As we know, today when one child is born, parents plan for her or his future from childhood, so they register her or him for the variety of classes. This process continues till young ages. As a result, the parents can control and guide their children more than past, and they have much effect on their decision making.
To summarize, as I mentioned, there are lots of reasons, like being more knowledgeable and paying more attention to children, why I believe that today juveniles are more dependent to their parents in their decisions.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, however, if, so, then, therefore, apart from, at least, for example, i think, as a result, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 62.0 43.0788530466 144% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2036.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 430.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73488372093 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55372829156 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.56084001226 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.453488372093 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 634.5 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 6.0 1.86738351254 321% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.3170639133 48.9658058833 160% => OK
Chars per sentence: 127.25 100.406767564 127% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.875 20.6045352989 130% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0625 5.45110844103 148% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.214226315036 0.236089414692 91% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0891919280939 0.076458572812 117% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0634783302511 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154666270968 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0487432554775 0.0645574589148 76% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.45 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.5 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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