TPO27: Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents' job than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents' job. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
While some people believe that continuing parents' job causes children to lose their innovation, there are quite a few numbers of people who claim that this idea is not convincing. To my way of thinking, choosing a similar job to parent's increase the probability of success because not only can children get help from their parents, but also some families are well known for their ancestral job.
The first reason which should be stated here is that as parents are expert in their job, so they can help their children. It is clear that if the field of work of children is irrelevant to their parents', they will unable to help them. For example, my father was an accountant in one company, when I was a child, often I went to his workplace, so I was familiar with his workplace and the tools that he worked with. Some years later, when I was going to his workplace I had a lot of information about specific tools that he was working with like, financial statement and some calculating programs. Then, I studied finance at University and I always asked my questions from my father, so he could help me. After that, I found a job in one financial company, till now my father can help me to solve some of my problems. Since, in my opinion, working in a relevant job from parents' can be effective for success.
Another point worth discussing here is that when people know some families as they are professional in one filed, it increases the chance of succeeding of their children. I think, this claim is more convenient in a small city or town. For example, in our city, there was one dentist who was famous because of his ability to cure people's teeth in the lowest time without making trouble in the future. Some years later, his son was beginning to cure people as a psychologist, yet people knew him as an expert doctor who could cure his patients without making a problem in the future. However, he did not have any experiences. As I mentioned here, occupying in one job that parents' are well known in it could help the children to be known in it among citizens.
To summarize, as I mentioned, there are some reasons which are discussed in the article like, getting help from family and being famous in one job which shows continuing the job of parents could rase the possibility of making a better future life.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, however, if, so, then, well, while, for example, i think, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1906.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 417.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57074340528 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5189133491 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51120933582 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.47721822542 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 596.7 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 53.6152016106 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 119.125 100.406767564 119% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0625 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.5625 5.45110844103 102% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.257616860314 0.236089414692 109% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0964808802789 0.076458572812 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0976086941416 0.0737576698707 132% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.191676139348 0.150856017488 127% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0905006519638 0.0645574589148 140% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.1 11.7677419355 111% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 62.01 58.1214874552 107% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.52 10.9000537634 87% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.8 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.0 10.002688172 130% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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