Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is better for children to choose jobs that are similar to their parents' job than to choose jobs that are very different from their parents' job. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that in this progressive and competitive world where we live, every individuals have been preoccupied with the most challenging decision in the critical stage of their life which is the issue of occupation. While most people believe that following the jobs' of parents and ancestors is a better option for children, others stand at the other side of the continuum, believing that children should choose a profession which is not the same as their parents. I, personally speaking, hold the opinion that children should not follow their parent's job and their occupation is better to be different. The reasons to support my viewpoint are elaborated upon in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, following the same job of the parents might not be interesting for the children. Love and affection about one's profession and career has a pivotal role in making the person have a thriving life in order to become a successful person. To put it in other words, the more children like their job, the higher the chance of becoming prosperous will be. A personal example can drive this notion home. My aunt and uncle are both physicists and as a result they wanted their only child to follow their job and become a doctor. However, my cousin thought he was not cut out to be a doctor since he was not into any science material and he had hard time understanding even the simplest concepts in this field. However, his parents persuaded him to attend the collage to pursue this job. After more than ten years, although he is a doctor, he has a miserable life since it is not what he was interested in. Had his parents let him to follow his dreams and not to have the same job as they did, he would have been happier and more enthusiastic in his life.
Furthermore, pursuing the same occupation of parents means turning a blind eye on one's own talent and make an irrational decision without considering one's inner abilities. It is crystal clear that each individual at every corner of the globe is endowed with a specific talent and ability, the flourishing of which heavily depends on the decision they make for their future. If children blindly follow their parents job, they will obscuring their talent and will never understand what they are really good at, or at least will find it out so late in stages of life that will neither help them nor will make any changes. As an illustration, when I became twenty years old, I decided to be an artist. However, I found out that my parents' job is much more convenient for me because they could easily spur their wisdom and experience on me, so I became a teacher. With the passage of time, it had become clear that I was not talented to be a teacher since I could see the difference between my way of teaching, which was really dull, and that of my parents, which everyone admired them for those techniques. Unfortunately, I was not able to go back in my life and become a musician as I wished to be. Had I given my career decision a thorough thought at first, I would have recognized my talents earlier and in a better way.
In conclusion, having the aforementioned reasons and examples into account, I do believe that children should have a job different from the occupation of their parents. It stands to reasons that children may not be interested in the job of their parents and besides they might not discover their own talents and abilities as well.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 122, Rule ID: ONES[1]
Message: Did you mean 'one's'?
Suggestion: one's
... the children. Love and affection about ones profession and career has a pivotal rol...
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Line 5, column 431, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'obscure'
Suggestion: obscure
...dly follow their parents job, they will obscuring their talent and will never understand ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
besides, first, furthermore, however, if, may, really, so, thus, well, while, at least, in conclusion, as a result, in other words, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 23.0 13.8261648746 166% => OK
Relative clauses : 18.0 11.0286738351 163% => OK
Pronoun: 82.0 43.0788530466 190% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2821.0 1977.66487455 143% => OK
No of words: 606.0 407.700716846 149% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.65511551155 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.96155895361 4.48103885553 111% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60519249965 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 281.0 212.727598566 132% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.463696369637 0.524837075471 88% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 882.0 618.680645161 143% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.602918292 48.9658058833 116% => OK
Chars per sentence: 122.652173913 100.406767564 122% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.347826087 20.6045352989 128% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.30434782609 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.320068494367 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.107799471582 0.076458572812 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0964235774416 0.0737576698707 131% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.242622204223 0.150856017488 161% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.073154064733 0.0645574589148 113% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.55 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.3 10.1575268817 121% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.69 8.01818996416 96% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.5 10.002688172 185% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 19.0 10.247311828 185% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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