Do you agree or disagree with the following statements?
Because people are busy doing so many different things, they do very few things well.
It goes without saying that in today’s progressive and modern world we live, people must handle different works in their daily life in order to reach their goals and satisfy their wants. In this regard, a controversial debate emerges among the people around the issue of whether being contemplated with all these disparate works would lead to a lower quality of performance, or people could handle them effectively. Personally speaking, I strongly believe that an overload of tasks to go through can decrease our work quality. Two reasons to substantiate my viewpoint are vindicated in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, it is crystal clear that human’s concentration power is limited, and the more tasks a person must do in a definite time, the fewer concentration assigns to each task, and the lower quality of results would appear. To be more specific, when people face different works, they cannot concentrate on each job properly, and they may have some errors and gaffes in their performance. These mistakes could reduce the quality of their final output, or in the worst scenario, ruin their work thoroughly. An example can drive this notion home correctly. I remember when I was a student at university, I lived in an independent house lonely. During the exams period, there were many tasks that I had to do, including studying for exams, cooking meals for myself, and also I worked as a freelancer and I had to respond to my employers too. As a result of all these responsibilities on my back, I usually ended up with foods that were not tasty at all and also I had to perform some of my works hastily to open up some time concentrate on my studying for exams.
Moreover, since people usually have limited time to do their jobs when their work volume increases and some works are inherently time-consuming, the proper time would not be dedicated to these works, and the final quality drops significantly. To put it in a more vivid picture, time is one of the most effective factors that could influence the quality of performance and having a deadline for a variety of works to go through will make people perform expeditiously and end up with poor results. For instance, although it is possible for students to receive their doctorate degree in four years, students who work and study simultaneously, usually finish their study with lower grades than full-time students or would not achieve to graduate within four years.
In Conclusion, considering all the abovementioned points and reasons into account, I firmly believe that an overload of works will lead to poor performance and results not only because people cannot focus on multiple things correctly, but also due to the fact that every task needs an appropriate time of performing that if not applied successfully would reduce the quality of work.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, if, may, moreover, so, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2368.0 1977.66487455 120% => OK
No of words: 476.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.97478991597 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67091256922 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.85230992633 2.67179642975 107% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.521008403361 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 739.8 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 84.7967504618 48.9658058833 173% => OK
Chars per sentence: 157.866666667 100.406767564 157% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.7333333333 20.6045352989 154% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.93333333333 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.107302670261 0.236089414692 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0371507337106 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0310345206828 0.0737576698707 42% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0664710169471 0.150856017488 44% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0196937639816 0.0645574589148 31% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.8 11.7677419355 151% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 40.01 58.1214874552 69% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.4 10.1575268817 152% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.14 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.96 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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