Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For the successful development of a country, it is more important for a government to spend money on the education of very young children(five to ten years old) than to spend money on universities.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
It goes without saying that in today's modern and progressive world we live, education is considered as one of the most vital sectors in each country, and it has been proved that investigating in education can affect the country's evolution and put it in a right way toward development. In this line of thought, there has always been a controversial debate among politicians around the issue of whether it is more critical for a country to underwrite rudimentary schools or provide its financial supports mostly for universities in order to achieve development. Personally speaking, I strongly believe that governments should give more budget to universities. Two reasons to substantiate my viewpoint are vindicated in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, since successful universities can create an international reputation and attract ingenious students from all over the world, governments should support these institutions more. To be more specific, offering financial aids to universities can allow them to enhance their level of education by hiring prominent professors, providing better facilities for their students, and encourage universities to do more research. In this way, the university ranking will improve among other universities from other countries, and more fervid students will decide to pursue their education journey in that university. For example, the U.S has the most prominent universities in the world, and each year, they select the best students from all over the world to study in the United States. Many of these students perform remarkable researches during their study time, which has implications for the government. On the other hand, the U.S government can hire these students after their graduation and gain the competitive advantage of having the expert workforce in the international scene. Therefore not only the country can exploit these bright minds after their graduation and have more progress, but also the students' research during their study time can create value for the country.
Moreover, governments should invest more money in universities because they can help to solve the country's problems in a specific area. To put it in a more vivid picture, universities are a place that scientists in each major gather around and do research together. Therefore, the government can use their scientific potential and find practical solutions to overcome the obstacles in the way of its development. An example can drive this notion home correctly. Five years ago, the United States defined some economic sanctions against my country of birth, Iran. Since Iran could not sell its oil to United States allies anymore, politicians started cooperating with universities and exploiting economists' advice and views to find a solution. After six months of collaboration between the government and universities, they came up with a proposal that not only introduced new ways to sell Iran's oil in international markets but also proposed a plan to reduce Iran's economic dependency to fossil fuels up to 50% in five years. Hence, universities should be supported by governments appropriately due to their role in solving macro problems.
In conclusion, considering all the abovementioned points and reasons into account, I firmly believe that governments should allocate more budget to universities not only because they can provide the country with talented students and exploit their potential but also because universities can offer a remarkable contribution in solving problems in the country level.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, moreover, so, therefore, for example, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 20.0 13.8261648746 145% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 86.0 52.1666666667 165% => OK
Nominalization: 19.0 8.0752688172 235% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 3003.0 1977.66487455 152% => OK
No of words: 548.0 407.700716846 134% => OK
Chars per words: 5.4799270073 4.8611393121 113% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.83832613839 4.48103885553 108% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04343840348 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 279.0 212.727598566 131% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.509124087591 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 945.0 618.680645161 153% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 78.0283762486 48.9658058833 159% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.15 100.406767564 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.4 20.6045352989 133% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.35 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147102771466 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0496392516632 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0265475852933 0.0737576698707 36% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0911645990401 0.150856017488 60% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0314688613712 0.0645574589148 49% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.1 11.7677419355 154% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.8 10.9000537634 136% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.95 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 86.8835125448 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 21.0 10.002688172 210% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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