One of the best ways that parents can help their teenage children prepare for adult life is to encourage them to take a part-time job.(Agree/Disagree - TPO24)
It goes without saying that in this progressive and sophisticated world we live, parents are always contemplated with the concern that what are the best methods of training kids for future responsibilities. In this regard, there has been a controversial debate among parents around the effectiveness of part-time jobs and whether encouraging teenage children for taking a part-time career can prepare them for adulthood, or not. Personally speaking, I strongly agree with the idea that by spurring teenagers for taking a part-time job, parents can assure that their children will be more prepared for the future. Two reasons to substantiate my viewpoint are vindicated in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, stimulating youth for taking part-time careers contribute to their financial responsibility in the future. To be more specific, by sending teenagers for part-time jobs, parents teach their children that they must be able to gain money for their own expenditures and understand that parents cannot provide them with money all the times. In this vein, kids will reduce their undue expectations from their family and learn to be more independent about their monetary affairs. If kids equipped with this behavior when they are teenagers, they will restrain it for their future stages of life and become more independent adults. An example can drive this notion home. When I was a teenager, my father talked to one of his friends who had a restaurant and asked him for me to work in his restaurant after school. Although I was not used to hardships of working in a restaurant, after receiving my first payment, I felt delighted about my independence and working became more pleasant for me. This experience helped me to taste the sweetness of being responsible for my spendings, and its favorability has stayed with me until today, that I am entirely accountable for my expenditures. Had not my father pushed me to work in his friend's restaurant, I would not become a financially responsible adult today.
Moreover, social relationships are one of the essential requirements in adulthood, and kids will learn the ability to have effective communications if their parents let them participate in part-time jobs. To put it in a more vivid picture, when kids start working somewhere, they would expose to more people in their job environments. This exposure is beneficial for children's social relationships in the future since they learn people's behaviors in society and how they must interact with different persons in the context of social contracts. For instance, for a kid who works in a cafe, there is the opportunity to meet different people with a wide range of personalities and learn how they must interact with them politely. Hence, parents can consider a part-time job as valuable training for their kids, which helps them to become more confident and affable in communicating with others.
In conclusion, considering all the abovementioned reasons and examples into account, I am of the idea that part-time career can train teenage children for their adult life not only by making them more financially responsible and independent but also due to providing a favorable environment for kids to learn how they must behave in their social interactions.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, moreover, so, for instance, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 70.0 43.0788530466 162% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2750.0 1977.66487455 139% => OK
No of words: 529.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19848771267 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79583152331 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02520787323 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 254.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.480151228733 0.524837075471 91% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 854.1 618.680645161 138% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 64.9503965856 48.9658058833 133% => OK
Chars per sentence: 144.736842105 100.406767564 144% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.8421052632 20.6045352989 135% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47368421053 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.367274976557 0.236089414692 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.126885623429 0.076458572812 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.116870211481 0.0737576698707 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.26510648276 0.150856017488 176% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0912943252985 0.0645574589148 141% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.0 11.7677419355 144% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 44.07 58.1214874552 76% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.18 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.62 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 122.0 86.8835125448 140% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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