Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.
It goes without saying that in today’s progressive world we live, choosing a right occupation is one of the most challenging decisions in humans life, since it has the potential to defines people’s success and well-being in their future. In this vein, with the advents of the modern world, a controversial debate has emerged among people around the idea of whether it was more comfortable in the past to determine which careers lead to future prosperity and better quality of life or it is more facile today. Personally speaking, I strongly believe that nowadays, it is more complicated than before to define which careers can guarantee a promising future. Two reasons to substantiate my viewpoint are illustrated in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, technological advances have made it difficult to determine an occupation’s future fate since robots and computers are taking the place of the human workforce in many industries. It is crystal clear that many jobs that in the past required a specialist to being performed are now getting done simply with the help of computers. Researchers declare that this pace of replacement is at its peak nowadays, and many of the careers that exist today will not be needed in the future. An example can drive this notion home correctly. Less than fifty years ago, there was a considerable demand for music performers in theaters and cinemas since playing a movie in these places were accompanied by live performances. However, with the advents of sounding technologies, movie makers started to produce musical parts of their films with computers and stoped associating with music players in theaters. If it was not because of the high rate of technological advances, the placement of musicians in the theaters was still entrenched.
Moreover, the supply of expert workforce in the contemporary world has been increased dramatically compared to the past times, whereas the demand almost remained stable. Therefore, as a result of today’s competitive working environment, the career type is not the only factor that determines one’s prosperity, and other factors, like prior experiences or educational degrees, have more weigh in assuring a person to be successful in a profession. For example, in not too far pasts, there were few doctors in the society and those who became doctors had a bright future since their income and job security was assured. However, nowadays, there are plenty of doctors in the community, and the factor of becoming a doctor cannot solely bring prosperity into people’s life. Instead, other factors like personal branding or studying at a well-known university are getting more weight.
In conclusion, considering all the abovementioned reasons and points into account, I firmly believe that it was much convenient in before to identify which type of job could lead to a luminous future, not only because technological advances are eliminating many occupational positions today but also due to the fact that nowadays we are facing a surplus in the supply of professional workforce.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, moreover, so, still, therefore, well, whereas, for example, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 26.0 15.1003584229 172% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 81.0 52.1666666667 155% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2605.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 493.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 5.28397565923 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71206996034 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.04722703735 2.67179642975 114% => OK
Unique words: 275.0 212.727598566 129% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.557809330629 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 833.4 618.680645161 135% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.6212052922 48.9658058833 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.235294118 100.406767564 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.0 20.6045352989 141% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.35294117647 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177170604467 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0500298858947 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0349267879703 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10710352218 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0246952116815 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 11.7677419355 152% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 33.58 58.1214874552 58% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.8 10.1575268817 156% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.94 10.9000537634 128% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.69 8.01818996416 121% => OK
difficult_words: 144.0 86.8835125448 166% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 19.0 10.002688172 190% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 81.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.5 Out of 30
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