Improvement in technology shows how people are engaged in more innovation. I agree with the statement that people are never satisfied with what they have; they always want something more. I have two reasons why people want something more every time.
To begin with, people are designed to desire more advantages than others. People from the hunter-gathering era stored more food for survival. More food leads to decrease in danger from hunting or gathering outside. However, the system of stacking more food nowadays turned into want for money; As money is the new form of resource for survival. To illustrate this, people live to earn money to get through and for entertainment. Hence people strive more for their living.
Secondly, people aspire for improvement. People continuously studying for more skill or intelligence. Studying shows how people are never satisfied with their current stage. To clarify this, factory workers study their area for higher efficiency working and higher wages. Professors and scientists continue tp learn for figuring out unknown information. Students study for a stable life or goal. As a result, people tend to yearn for improvement and satisfaction.
In conclusion, people want to be better than others and intend to improve. Which is the nature of human society. Therefore, people are never satisfied with what they have.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
hence, however, if, second, secondly, so, therefore, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 8.0 15.1003584229 53% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 0.0 9.8082437276 0% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 2.0 11.0286738351 18% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 11.0 43.0788530466 26% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 52.1666666667 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1149.0 1977.66487455 58% => More number of characters wanted.
No of words: 217.0 407.700716846 53% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.29493087558 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 3.8380880478 4.48103885553 86% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73360077781 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 127.0 212.727598566 60% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.585253456221 0.524837075471 112% => OK
syllable_count: 357.3 618.680645161 58% => syllable counts are too short.
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 11.0 20.1344086022 55% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 23.2295542008 48.9658058833 47% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 60.4736842105 100.406767564 60% => OK
Words per sentence: 11.4210526316 20.6045352989 55% => More words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 4.94736842105 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.311316500524 0.236089414692 132% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.114199929095 0.076458572812 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.168941002819 0.0737576698707 229% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.249692853224 0.150856017488 166% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.187045413581 0.0645574589148 290% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.2 11.7677419355 78% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.31 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.6 10.1575268817 75% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.22 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.55 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 60.0 86.8835125448 69% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 6.4 10.0537634409 64% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Minimum 250 words wanted.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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