• Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People care more about public recognition than about money. Even if no more money is given, public recognition can still make people work harder.
A glance at people’s attitude toward life satisfaction, brings to the light a question that has been asked several times, namely, whether money is more determinant factor to work harder or public recognition. Although most people at young ages may think that money is more important, I, as a person at the beginning of fourth decade of my life, believe that public recognition is highly substantial. This claim is not just based on my experiences and academic research proves this idea.
The foremost reason why I am supporting this idea, lies in the fact that human is a social creature and tend to be part of a group. Nobody likes to live alone in a cave and does not have any contact with his friends and family. A study at Harvard university, department of sociology, has been conducted a research on more than 700 men to see what is the most important factor that makes them happy and healthy. Despite of our expectation, it was not money or education. People who had warm and welcoming relationship with others had better quality of life. This good relationship comes from public recognition and the more relations we make, the more happier life we have. Therefore, public attention makes individuals to try harder.
Another subtle point that I should deem is the fact that money, itself, is a way to get more people interest. People normally respect wealthy persons more. For example, when we do not know a person for the first days, our conversations are definitely different from when we understand that he is a doctor or businessman. Despite of the fact that money makes our life easier, after satisfying our basic needs, money is just a means to increase our socioeconomical level of our life. Hence, the main reason of having more money is public interest.
Admittedly, some people feel more assure if they have a lot of money in their bank account. Because of famine era in the past, there are some persons who do not feel safe and secure if they do not have good amount of savings. Nevertheless, I still claim that 90% of society are more interested in honor than money.
Due to the aforementioned argument explored in the previous statements, I strongly assert that even with less possession, most people are glad as long as they have sufficient public recognition.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply 'research'.
Suggestion: research
...rtment of sociology, has been conducted a research on more than 700 men to see what is the...
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Message: Use only 'happier' (without 'more') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: happier
...ion and the more relations we make, the more happier life we have. Therefore, public attenti...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, hence, if, may, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 39.0 43.0788530466 91% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1903.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 394.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.82994923858 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45527027702 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75889609083 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.558375634518 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 603.9 618.680645161 98% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.2340781132 48.9658058833 103% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.157894737 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7368421053 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.68421052632 5.45110844103 68% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.33998962799 0.236089414692 144% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.105958291308 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0689645749921 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.183348046001 0.150856017488 122% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0368051544173 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.7 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.73 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.