Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People learn things better from those at their own level-such as fellow students or co-workers-than from those at a higher level, such as teachers or supervisors.
Throughout history, there have been different approaches through learning for each individual and consequently, the person who teaches new concepts plays a vital role. In this regard, there has been the contention that from whom people can learn the most. Some people believe that learning things from those people who are their same level would be more effective than learning from people at higher levels. I concur with this idea and I use two reasons to prove my point of view.
First, people learn better from others who are at their level, mainly because they feel emotionally connected. These days so bustling is the life that individuals, especially while they are under pressure, believe that their superiors do not understand them. Workers usually see their bosses like people who sit in their seats, drinking their coffee planning for their next trip to Paris, not understanding the employees' financial, professional and emotional problems in life. Assuming superiors as arrogant people, neither staff like to listen to their bosses, nor intend to learn anything from them. As a result, staff usually rely on other people who believe that understand them; other people suffering from the same condition. For instance, once in a movie, it was shown that business workers relied on each others words and tried to learn new skills or even solving their professional problems by asking their colleagues rather than their boss, because they believed that their boss would pulverize their ego and would not care about their problems and on the other hand, co-workers thoroughly understand them because they are all in equal conditions.
Second, people believe that other individuals at their level advise them carefully. Usually, students in a classroom would not ask their professor how to solve their bad habits through their studying, since they believe that the professor would merely give them general treatments. Nonetheless, friends and classmates would listen to people on their level precisely and would try to help each person distinctively due to each person's distinctive characteristics. These people declare that superior people like professors or other faculty members are so busy with their teachings and research that they would not allocate sufficient time to listen to students' problems and just give a general solution that may not work. Once, I have read in an educational magazine that students usually do not raise their hands in classes to ask their problems not because they lack self-confidence, but because they assume that the professor would not give them accurate answers. Consequently, students, especially when they have missed a class, usually rely on their friends in order to solve their problem or even learn the new concepts rather than asking their professors.
All in all, I believe that people nowadays are more convenient to learn from others who are at their same level because not only they feel more emotionally close to each other, but also because they believe that these people would precisely and carefully listen to them and then give them solutions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, if, may, nonetheless, second, so, then, while, even so, for instance, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 24.0 11.0286738351 218% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 74.0 43.0788530466 172% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2613.0 1977.66487455 132% => OK
No of words: 499.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 5.23647294589 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72634191566 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57531170786 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 237.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.4749498998 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 776.7 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 29.0 20.1344086022 144% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.8967887963 48.9658058833 177% => OK
Chars per sentence: 153.705882353 100.406767564 153% => OK
Words per sentence: 29.3529411765 20.6045352989 142% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.76470588235 5.45110844103 142% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.244061913428 0.236089414692 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.106109624867 0.076458572812 139% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0869504213449 0.0737576698707 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178560860402 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.055837131662 0.0645574589148 86% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.9 11.7677419355 152% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 42.04 58.1214874552 72% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.6 10.1575268817 144% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.7 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.6 10.0537634409 135% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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