Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People learn things better from those at their own level-such as fellow students or co-workers-than from those at a higher level, such as teachers or supervisors.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Continuous learning is crucial in everyone's life. It provides essential information to servive many difficulties. In my opinion, people learn things better from those at higher level, such as teachers or supervisors than from those at their own level, such as fellow students or co-workers.
First, I think teachers have comprehensive information about the topic. That means, they will be able to transfer any information completely. For instance, my brother Sami is a university student. His major is biology. Last semester, he was sick for one week. He missed many classes in one of his courses. He tried to overcome that by asking his friend for help. Unfortunately, his friend was not good in this course, so he misstold many points, and he forgot to mension examples of acellular organisms. At the test, there was an important question about listing three kinds of these organisms. Sami did not know them, so he failed the test. After his failing, he went to his professor, and he asked for help to be able to pass the final exam.
Second, I believe that supervisors have more experience than other colluges. They have creative ways to simplify complex information. In fact, learning things from an expert is more beneficial than from a co-worker. For example, my second brother Rami is a computer science student. He was in his last semester when he started to turn at a company. He faced many issues in understanding the computer system of this company. Therefore, he asked other employees to teach him,but this was the worst decision. He spent a month trying to understand it with no improvement. His manager was very friendly. She offered to explain everything for him. She gave him the guideline, she practiced in front of him, and she supervised him while he was doing his work. It took from him four days to fully get it. Now, he is expecting to be assigned for a full-time position in this company with a bonus for every task he accomplishes.
To sum up, people learn things better from teachers or supervisors not only because they fully understand the subject, but also it is more intresting and beneficial to learn from an expert. Moreover, I suggest for professors to have an extra office hours to answer students question any time a question pumps to their minds. It will be better than waiting for the next class time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 473, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , but
...e, he asked other employees to teach him,but this was the worst decision. He spent a...
^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, moreover, second, so, therefore, while, for example, for instance, i think, in fact, such as, in my opinion, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1940.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 401.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.83790523691 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47492842339 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.7426750906 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.54114713217 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 597.6 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 26.0 9.59856630824 271% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 30.0 20.6003584229 146% => OK
Sentence length: 13.0 20.1344086022 65% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 39.9792307191 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 64.6666666667 100.406767564 64% => OK
Words per sentence: 13.3666666667 20.6045352989 65% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 12.0 4.88709677419 246% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.221567591232 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0529419149069 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.129169405207 0.0737576698707 175% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.212062473306 0.150856017488 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.209601694454 0.0645574589148 325% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.1 11.7677419355 69% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.74 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.2 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.75 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 5.0 10.002688172 50% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 7.2 10.0537634409 72% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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