Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment—doing things they like to do—rather than doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people agree to do things they like to do, rather than doing things they should do. They cite that personal enjoyment is very important, and it is a good way to relieve stress. However, I strongly disagree with this and believe that doing things that are necessary are vital to stay focused in our life. I will give two reasons to explain my stance.
First of all, doing necessary things helps us manage our time. For example, during college time, I always used to complete my assignment in due time and get it credited. There were many friends of mine who used to procrastinate due assignments. As a result, I had enough time to prepare for my end exams, whereas those friends of mine suffered during examinations. If they would have submitted their assignment on time, instead of spending on playing vide game, they would also have enough time to prepare notes. This is important to do things which are necessary to keep us on scheduled time and this habit also helps us in our career. Thus, for me, doing things is more important than personal enjoyment.
Second, the habit of choosing our task than personal enjoyment also helps us in our professional life. For example, a co-worker of mine during field sampling draws hand made sketch to help later while writing report. This saves a lot of his time as he does not have to remember the outline of the sampling field and he used this time to file his findings. While other people stay late in the laboratory upon coming deadlines to complete their work, my co-worker invests his time toward his cooking passion. If the other has not wasted their time earlier, they would not be stressing near the deadlines. It is also vital for the mental health, as it gives us enough time to balance our personal and professional life. Thus, rather than spending extensive time on personal enjoyment, doing things which should be done is a more wise decision.
To conclude, the idea of choosing between personal enjoyment and necessary thing is very complex. Some people have suggested that one should invest more toward personal enjoyment, as the goal is to stay happy. However, I believe that doing things which we should do is more important as it has a wholly positive impact on our personal and work life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 375, Rule ID: IF_WOULD_HAVE_VBN[1]
Message: Did you mean 'had submitted'?
Suggestion: had submitted
...e suffered during examinations. If they would have submitted their assignment on time, instead of sp...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, however, if, second, so, thus, whereas, while, for example, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1869.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 4.73164556962 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4320353011 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 181.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.458227848101 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 585.0 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.4176565584 48.9658058833 56% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.0 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.8095238095 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.398820661344 0.236089414692 169% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.130105363746 0.076458572812 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.151952586342 0.0737576698707 206% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.303206960717 0.150856017488 201% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.153555730211 0.0645574589148 238% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.15 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.97 8.01818996416 87% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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