I agree that today people spend time on personnel enjoyment, but I disagree that they do things they like rather than doing things they should do. There are different ways of spending time, and we must look for the options that match our taste. Personally, if I have been asked, I believe that people these days spend appropriate time on things they should do. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, these days, everyone is swamped in their job and has a second to spend on themselves: as they experience workload and pressure that requires them to do overtime to complete their tasks. During their free time, everyone desires to do things in order to relax from work stress; many prefer to go to the gym. As a result, they exercise to follow a healthy lifestyle, which is essential in today's world. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. Four years ago, when I joined college to pursue my bachelor's, I used to feel burden of all the lecturers going from morning till evening and then home assignments to be submitted before deadlines. I was looking for something to invest my relaxing time on and in return it can benefit me in some way, so I accompanied my friends to the gym after college, and after some days, I started liking it. This not only helped me with relieving stress but also helped me to bond with my friends and become a healthy and fit person. This depicts that using energy and time on something you like, which can reduce your stress and improve your health, is the best time spent.
Secondly, people these days are putting up their time in developing their hobbies. Everyone has their interests, and they love to spend time working on what they like. Some people are proficient enough in converting their hobbies to employment opportunities, which give them fruits further in their life. For example, my uncle, who is an skillful painter, started pursuing his career in painting after completing his graduation. He is such a magnificent artist that people around the world look for his exhibitions to get art for decorating their workplaces or homes. This indicates that if my uncle has not followed what he liked, he would not have been such an amazing artist today.
In conclusion, I think that most of the people are spending their time on appropriate things. This is because people are resourceful, they are fetching benefits from their allurements, and because people are carving their careers through things they like the most, they are doing things they should do.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 336, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...eir life. For example, my uncle, who is an skillful painter, started pursuing his ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, for example, i feel, i think, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 80.0 43.0788530466 186% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2128.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 446.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77130044843 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5955099915 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.50014779671 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529147982063 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 643.5 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.2423403622 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 106.4 100.406767564 106% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.3 5.45110844103 116% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.377558704795 0.236089414692 160% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.118864267497 0.076458572812 155% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.160395735751 0.0737576698707 217% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.278625632691 0.150856017488 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.161089523981 0.0645574589148 250% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.88 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 9.0 10.002688172 90% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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