Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

These days advertisement has more impact on people than ever before. In my opinion, ads targeting young kids should not be allowed. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore further.

First of all, children of this young age don’t have the acumen to decide if these advertisements are beneficial for them or not. At this young age, they want everything they like. Therefore, if televisions will show these ads repeatedly throughout a day, they will get attracted to them and will make an effort to get them by influencing their parents or by crying. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. Seven years ago, when my kid was of this adolescent age, he was too much into watching television each day. As part of regular shows, he used to see advertisements for video games and requested me to get one for him. Although I was not financially sound to afford a video game, I have to get one for him on his commitment that he will not spend more than half an hour a day playing games. His obsession with video games was that he started to kill the maximum of his evenings playing games. As a result, he started ignoring his studies and failed in his mid-term tests. Had he not got influenced by TV ads, he would not have flunked his exam.

Secondly, companies only have intentions to sell their products at any cost. To accomplish this, these companies have marketing departments that make strategies and hire professional ad companies for creating appealing ads. Further, they target those shows and channels which are mostly watched by young kids and purchase ad time for those shows and channels. For example, when I used to be a kid, we used to have ads for superhero toys, games, bottles, and other daily use accessories on the cartoon and Disney channels, but those ads were rarely seen on other Hollywood channels. Moreover, those ads used to have famous child artists using those products which create more influence on our minds.

In Conclusion, I believe that television advertisements directed towards young kids should be banned. It is because children are not mature enough to decide right for them and because companies want to sell their products at any cost without thinking about its impact on kids.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 7, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'days'' or 'day's'?
Suggestion: days'; day's
These days advertisement has more impact on people...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, as to, for example, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1870.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80719794344 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63687810409 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.555269922879 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 572.4 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.4462590728 48.9658058833 97% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.5 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.45 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133743046187 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0498744318453 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.06344153517 0.0737576698707 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.101804912568 0.150856017488 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0396145787222 0.0645574589148 61% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.0 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.62 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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