With the popularity of television, increasing development of television advertising has become the undeniable fact. It's worth pointing out that the television advertising serves as a double-edged sword. Currently, public concerns focus on the negative impacts of television advertising. Most of them claim that television advertising directed towards young children aged two to five is too harmful. As far as I am concerned, this standpoint is pretty convincing.
First of all, young children are inclined to pick up everything they saw and listened ever. Moreover, they are in the stage of knowing nothing about limitations. Thus, they are not allowed to get what they saw in television advertising immediately, since it’s not an enabling factor for their growing. If they couldn’t develop the quality of self-discipline at that age, great chances are that they would be spoiled and as a result, it’s nearly impossible that they are incapable of combating the setbacks and hardships independently. Thus, the television advertising directed towards young children should be prohibited.
In addition, the language style of television advertising will impede children's language learning. In other words, advertisement is not a good vehicle for knowledge. As is common sense, Short and profits-oriented language style of television advertising makes itself a worse example for children to model. It is not uncommon that children aged two to five are in a golden period when they can absorb knowledge as much as possible and lay a solid foundation for their future language capability and communication skills. Patents play an important role in their kids' personal and mental development and assume the responsibility for their kids’ education. Therefore, they are supposed to place emphasis on regular and scientific methodology rather than to immerse their kids in a vast majority of advertising. Detaching kids from advertising and then providing them with high-quality learning resources are the effective way to assist kids in improving their language ability.
To sum up, based on above arguments, I firmly draw the conclusion that children should be separated from television advertising.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, moreover, so, then, therefore, thus, in addition, as a result, first of all, in other words, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1891.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 336.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.62797619048 4.8611393121 116% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.28139028586 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.21739130175 2.67179642975 120% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.568452380952 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 590.4 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.8 1.51630824373 119% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.2399161087 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.055555556 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.6666666667 20.6045352989 91% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.27777777778 5.45110844103 115% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 6.0 4.88709677419 123% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.261120580974 0.236089414692 111% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0866138584363 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0856894991793 0.0737576698707 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157837838489 0.150856017488 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0456377059383 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.4 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 36.28 58.1214874552 62% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.37 10.9000537634 141% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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