Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment—doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
There are many different ways of spending time, and it is important that we look for the options that match our personality. Personally, if I have been asked, I believe that people these days spend time appropriately on things they should spend time on. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, everyone these days is busy in their jobs and get very less time to spend on themselves. They have enough work pressure that many times they have to do overtime to complete their tasks. During their free time, every one wants to spend time as they like so as to relax from work stress. Many people prefer to go to gym after their work or during free time. As a result, they exercise and follow a healthy lifestyle which is important in today's life. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. Four years ago, when I joined college to pursue my bachelors, I used to feel a lot of pressure with all the lecturers going from morning to evening and then home assignments. I was looking for something, which can be a good pass time and can benefit me in someway. I joined my friends who used to go to gym after college and after some days started liking it. This not only helped me with relieving stress, but in addition helped me to make new friends and become a healthy person. This clearly depicts that spending time on something you like which can relieve your stress and improve your health, is the best time spent.
Secondly, people these days are putting up their time in developing their hobbies. Everyone has their own interests and they love to spend time working on what they like. Some people are proficient in those such that they convert their hobbies to employment opportunities which gives them fruits further in their life. For example, my uncle, who is an excellent painter started pursuing his career in painting after completing his graduation. He is such a magnificent artist that people around world look for his exhibitions to get painting for decorating their workplaces or homes. This indicates that if my uncle has not followed what he liked, he would not have been such an amazing artist today.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that people are spending their time on appropriate things which they should spend time on. This is because people are smart enough that they are finding benefits from their personal enjoyments, and because people are carving their careers through things they like the most.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 11, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
There are many different ways of spending time, and it is import...
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Line 5, column 268, Rule ID: SO_AS_TO[1]
Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...ry one wants to spend time as they like so as to relax from work stress. Many people pre...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, as to, for example, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 19.0 11.0286738351 172% => OK
Pronoun: 76.0 43.0788530466 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2064.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 437.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 4.72311212815 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57214883401 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.41883682608 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503432494279 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 630.0 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.5469281815 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.8181818182 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.8636363636 20.6045352989 96% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.95454545455 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.238166114905 0.236089414692 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0735212248292 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.061246945018 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.155446404356 0.150856017488 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0499663373439 0.0645574589148 77% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.7 11.7677419355 91% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.1 10.9000537634 93% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.47 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 80.0 86.8835125448 92% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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