Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed toward young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

These days advertisement has more impact on people than ever before. In my opinion, advertisements targeting young kids should not be allowed. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explore further.

First of all, children of this young age don’t have the acumen to decide if these advertisements are good or bad for them. At this young age, they want everything they like. Therefore, if televisions will show these ads again and again throughout a day, they will get attracted to them and will make an effort to get them by influencing their parents or by crying. My personal experience is a compelling example of this. Seven years ago, when my kid was of this adolescent age, he was too much into watching television each day. As part of normal shows, he uses to see advertisements for video games and requested me to get one for him. Although I was not financially good to afford a video game, I have to get one for him on his promise that he will not spend more than half an hour a day playing games. His obsession with video games was that he started to spend the maximum of his evening playing games. As a result, he started ignoring his studies and failed in his mid-term tests. Had he not got influenced by TV ads, he would not have flunked his exam.

Secondly, companies only have intentions to sell their products at any cost. To accomplish this these companies have marketing departments that make strategies and hire professional ad companies for creating appealing ads. Further, they target those shows and channels which are mostly watched by young kids and purchase ad time for those shows and channels. For example, when I use to be a kid, we use to have ads for superhero toys, games, bottles and other daily use accessories on the cartoon and Disney channels but those ads were rarely seen on other Hollywood channels. Moreover, those ads use to have famous child artists using those products which create more influence on our minds.

In conclusion, I believe that television advertisements directed towards young kids should be banned. This is because children are not mature enough to decide good for them and because companies want to sell their products at any cost without thinking about its impact on kids.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: used
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, therefore, as to, for example, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, first of all, in my opinion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1867.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 391.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77493606138 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44676510885 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.62257727785 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.539641943734 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 16.0 9.59856630824 167% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.5993562187 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.35 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.55 20.6045352989 95% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.1 5.45110844103 130% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.142410320553 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0540658931187 0.076458572812 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0681369149072 0.0737576698707 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.112078035052 0.150856017488 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.049327344275 0.0645574589148 76% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.39 10.9000537634 95% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 84.0 86.8835125448 97% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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