Money plays a very important role in an individual’s life. There is an old saying that if a person is financially good he can buy anything in this world. Personally, I believe that it will not be a good idea to have children start managing their money at a young age. The rationale behind this will be elaborated in the ensuing paragraphs by two fundamental reasons.
The first reason which juts of mind is that, young children are not too much experienced to deal with money. At their age, they should prioritize to do well in their studies or to start getting involved in sports which can help them form a firm career in their future. They are already tired with their everyday school work that having an extra responsibility will feel a great burden for them. My own experience is a compelling example of this. Ten years ago, I used to study in my middle school. My father used to give me ten dollars every week as my pocket money. Instead of taking that money from him and saving it, I used to ask him to keep that with him and I will take it once I need it. To track my money feels like a task to me and I was already overwhelmed with all my school studies that I was not ready to take a new task. This states that even though we feel that we are ready to take an extra responsibility, but we don’t have enough time or experience to manage that task.
In approaching this issue, apart from the point I mentioned above, another equally important reason that should be scrutinized is that, it is not fair to say that if a kid starts managing money at young age can only grow into a responsible adult. There are many people who have been ignorant during their childhood and have become great entrepreneurs now. They have become financial gurus for other big companies and are managing large number of transactions for these large multi nationals. For example, my sister used to be spend money wastefully during her young days. My mother used to ask her a lot to keep track of her spending but she never paid attention to her. Now, as she has grown she has been graduated as a financial consultant and is working for a big companies managing their finances without a loss of penny. This depicts that some kids who use to be spendthrift during their childhood turn out to be much responsible in managing money than other are today.
In summary, taking all the aforementioned ideas into consideration, I think that it is not a good idea for children to start managing money at young age. This is because children are not experienced enough to take care of money, and because we cannot estimate from a person’s childhood that how he will manage money once he is adult.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, if, so, well, apart from, for example, i think, in summary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 27.0 15.1003584229 179% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 20.0 11.0286738351 181% => OK
Pronoun: 79.0 43.0788530466 183% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2203.0 1977.66487455 111% => OK
No of words: 488.0 407.700716846 120% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5143442623 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.70007681154 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61770014285 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 235.0 212.727598566 110% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.481557377049 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 700.2 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.6338508906 48.9658058833 93% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.136363636 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.1818181818 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.18181818182 5.45110844103 58% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.25592608605 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.077399291962 0.076458572812 101% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0438838434443 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.157508998045 0.150856017488 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.025468928066 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.9 11.7677419355 93% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.88 10.9000537634 81% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.86 8.01818996416 86% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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