Do you agree or disagree with the following statement People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

Grammar and spelling errors:
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...ryone desires and infact everyone needs.While some people might believe that people t...
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... love, I do not accord with this notion.This is mainly due to the fact that people d...
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...re time thses days that they can afford spending on pampering themselves. To begin with...
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...people are engaged in nine-to-five jobs.Additionally, they get a lot of stuff to work from h...
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...ey get a lot of stuff to work from home.Hence, the so called humans have now become r...
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...ow become robots who are forced to work twenty four by seven.Thus, the question of taking s...
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...are forced to work twenty four by seven.Thus, the question of taking some time for p...
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...ime for personal enjoyment seems absurd.For example- my father works in a multinati...
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...work on that he barely gets time for us.He is always engrossed handling clients an...
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...ing clients and attending meeting calls.In other words, these 'human machines...
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...ad, take the example of my close friend.He is extremely talented in arts and is a ...
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... arts and is a proficient guitar player.He always aspired to become a professional...
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...ired to become a professional guitarist.Nevertheless, he could not earn a penny from his fir...
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...penny from his first job as a guitarist.Consequently, he gave up his hobby and his passion a...
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...to earn bread and butter for his family.Now, he rarely finds time to comfort himsel...
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... by playing his favourite guitar chords.Hence, it can be easily drawn out that the th...
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...are fond of often have to be sacrificed.Therefore, the question of devoting time to perso...
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...nal enjoyment seems to me clearly vague.The pace with which the world is rushing cl...
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...ivities that they have a proclivity for.This is because of the hectic schedule that ...
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...tic schedule that these workmen possess.Thus, people do not spend too much time on t...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, hence, if, nevertheless, so, therefore, thus, while, for example, in conclusion, no doubt, in other words, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1677.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 339.0 407.700716846 83% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.94690265487 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.29091512845 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.19674469606 2.67179642975 120% => OK
Unique words: 191.0 212.727598566 90% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.563421828909 0.524837075471 107% => OK
syllable_count: 522.0 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 4.0 20.6003584229 19% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 84.0 20.1344086022 417% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 178.849797316 48.9658058833 365% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 419.25 100.406767564 418% => Less chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 84.75 20.6045352989 411% => Less words per sentence wanted.
Discourse Markers: 36.5 5.45110844103 670% => Less transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 20.0 5.5376344086 361% => Less language errors wanted.
Sentences with positive sentiment : 4.0 11.8709677419 34% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.255693789998 0.236089414692 108% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.178532998916 0.076458572812 234% => Sentence topic similarity is high.
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11996654381 0.0737576698707 163% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.178532998916 0.150856017488 118% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11996654381 0.0645574589148 186% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 44.3 11.7677419355 376% => Automated_readability_index is high.
flesch_reading_ease: -5.32 58.1214874552 -9% => Flesch_reading_ease is low.
smog_index: 13.0 6.10430107527 213% => Smog_index is high.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 34.9 10.1575268817 344% => Flesch kincaid grade is high.
coleman_liau_index: 12.61 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 11.3 8.01818996416 141% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 26.5 10.002688172 265% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 35.6 10.0537634409 354% => Gunning_fog is high.
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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