Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
People today spend too much time on personal enjoyment—doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
These days, developing new technology and easy accessibility to many facilities cause more amusement in people's life. Unlike in the past, nowadays people spend more money and time on relaxation and enjoyment. I believe that today people spend too much on personal enjoyment-doing things they like to do rather than doing things they should do. I have several reasons, and I will develop my ideas in the subsequent paragraphs:
First of all, I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own experience. Recently, I had tons of work to do, for instance, my thesis, preparation for final exams, my TCF exam( which is evaluate your ability in french language), and so forth. But instead of doing my works, I'd rather spend my time with my friends or be on social media. I know we have to have priorities in our lives, but sometimes we'd rather delay our works.
Besides, there are lots of phycology classes and seminars or movies all over the world which encourage people to live in the present. In their opinion, we don't know whereas we are alive in next month or be dead. So, the best thing we can do is enjoy our life as much as we can. Instead of spending our time working so hard for tomorrow which is uncertain, try to be in an intimate atmosphere with our friends, travel even with low facilities and live in the moment.
Furthermore, developing technology and growing social networks all around the world make our works easier. For instance, in our modern world, there is no need to go out for shopping, or reserving tickets(waiting on a long queue for buy ticket for the cinema or go-to agency for trip ticket), or wast numerous time in traffic for go to classes you can do all these things online and save a tremendous amount of time for your enjoyment. So when you have lots of spare time you'd rather do some amusement
and think that you will always have time for things you should do.
In conclusion, In light of the above-mentioned reasons, not only I believe that people spend too much time on personal-enjoyment, but also I truly admire this idea and think this could be a lifestyle. We don't know about tomorrow but we do know the present so we should enjoy it. There will always be some works to do but they can wait for us.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'evaluated'.
Suggestion: evaluated
...n for final exams, my TCF exam which is evaluate your ability in french language, and so...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: I'd
...o forth. But instead of doing my works, Id rather spend my time with my friends or...
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Line 2, column 439, Rule ID: WED_WE_D[2]
Message: Did you mean 'we'd'?
Suggestion: we'd
... priorities in our lives, but sometimes wed rather delay our works. Besides, there...
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Line 3, column 155, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...ve in the present. In their opinion, we dont know whereas we are alive in next month...
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Line 3, column 451, Rule ID: IN_THE_MOMENT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'at the moment' (=currently)?
Suggestion: at the moment
...ravel even with low facilities and live in the moment. Furthermore, developing technology an...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: you'd
...nt. So when you have lots of spare time youd rather do some amusement and think th...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...spare time youd rather do some amusement and think that you will always have time...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...and think this could be a lifestyle. We dont know about tomorrow but we do know the ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, first, furthermore, if, so, whereas, for instance, in conclusion, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 52.0 43.0788530466 121% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1866.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 410.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5512195122 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.49982852243 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.63661131279 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.512195121951 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 587.7 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.8483458423 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.764705882 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.1176470588 20.6045352989 117% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76470588235 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 6.0 4.53405017921 132% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.348483228086 0.236089414692 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.124829336891 0.076458572812 163% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.176778043578 0.0737576698707 240% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.223457354324 0.150856017488 148% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.129485193998 0.0645574589148 201% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.1 11.7677419355 103% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.41 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.64 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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