Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People who cannot accept criticism from others cannot be successful at working in a group Use reasons and examples to explain your choice.
There is no shortage of debate about whether people must be open to critisem or not. Although many believe individuals who cannot criticism from other can be successful at working in a group. I, on the other hand, believe people must accept criticism if they want to be successful at working in a group. I will address the most discernible reasons why I feel this way in the following.
To begin with, there is a consensus about humans being and we all believe no one is complete, which means that everyone may make mistake. While only few people accept this idea about themselves, because many of us think that our work and decisions is are all the time. Thus, we must listen to other ideas and accept their criticism, to avoid mistake. Because I believe most of the time our decisions are not base on real facts and our works are based on assumptions. Admittedly, it is more possible for individuals to become successful when he/she be open to criticism. Becauseit is more possible that our friends or our group members be more experienced, and listening to their critisems will help us to avoid mistake and become successful. Take Jake as an example. However he is a good computer programmer but he made some mistakes in his work. I recall that when I told him it is better to use C++ language instead of Java, and it is better to review his code to avoid mistake. He became angry and told me he is the best programmer and he did not need to do that. Not only that but, when other employee told him it is better to be polite with customer he became angry, because the thoauth they were wrong and he did not do any mistake. Finally our supervisor had to fired him because he did not accept criticism.
Moreover, accepting other critisecm is a cost that we should pay to avoid loosing our connection in group. For instance, I used to be jealous, and did not endure anyone criticism. When I was a university student, I worked in a group as a volunteer, and because I was beginner I made a lot of mistakes, but I did not accept my team members critiscm, because I taught they were wrong, and I am better than them. Gradually thus they cut their relationships with me, in order to avoid conflict, and they fired me from their group.
In conclusion, it is for all the aforementioned reasons, I firmly believe that people who cannot accept criticism from others cannot be successful at working in a group. This is because maybe other people opinion is true and it helps us to avoid mistake, and because accepting other criticism is a cost that we should pay to avoid losing our connector in group.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: “Although” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...people must be open to critisem or not. Although many believe individuals who cannot cri...
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Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'is'.
Suggestion: is
...iduals to become successful when he/she be open to criticism. Becauseit is more p...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: However,
...me successful. Take Jake as an example. However he is a good computer programmer but he...
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Finally,
...re wrong and he did not do any mistake. Finally our supervisor had to fired him because...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, finally, however, if, may, moreover, so, thus, while, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 32.0 15.1003584229 212% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 77.0 43.0788530466 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2132.0 1977.66487455 108% => OK
No of words: 471.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 4.52653927813 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.65859790218 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.58106343775 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.447983014862 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 682.2 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 45.9208130849 48.9658058833 94% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.9090909091 100.406767564 97% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4090909091 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.81818181818 5.45110844103 107% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.2833069781 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0948464352909 0.076458572812 124% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.11528344139 0.0737576698707 156% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.232443118627 0.150856017488 154% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.11710856024 0.0645574589148 181% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.6 11.7677419355 90% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.99 10.9000537634 82% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.06 8.01818996416 88% => OK
difficult_words: 71.0 86.8835125448 82% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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