Maxim Gorky said, “When work is a pleasure, life is joy! When work is a duty, life is slavery.” Jobs play one of the important roles in our lives so, it is critically important that we should choose our jobs so carefully. In this time, have a good job with a good salary is a sign of success. Since our jobs is related to our success, some of my friends believe that people who have learned many different skills have a greater chance to be succeed at some point in the future rather than who focus on learning only on skill. Other have opposite opinion about this statement. They believe that who focus on learning only one skill has a better knowledge about that and they will be expert in their skill. As far as I am concerned I claim that people that focus on various skills have better chance to be succeed in their life rather than people who learn only one skill. I feel this way for two main reasons, which I will explain in the following essay.
The first and foremost reason that comes into the writer’s mind, is that learning diverse type of skills make us to have better chance in order to find a job. In this modern time, many companies like to hire someone that have variegated skills in their resume because they think that the world is going to be larger and more complexity so, need members that have expert in some fields that one day they use their another type of their skill to continue or finish the project’s companies. My personal experience is a compelling illustration of this. I and my brother are twins. When we were at high school, I decided to choose many courses and tried to be master in those courses while my brother pick just one major and continued that one. After our graduation, we went to a software company for a job. The manager hired me to work with them and they didn’t recruit my brother because they said that the purpose of our company and many other companies is that to hire someone a wide variety skill.
Another equally imperative reason which deserves some words here is that if we know a lot of things in many subjects, we have a greater chance to create something wonderful. This activity gives a significant opportunity to individuals to become more creative and thus this creativity provides a good atmosphere to become more productive. On the other hand, concentrating on only one skill, not only is more tedious but also is an obstacle to being productive. Take an example of a worker in a company who knows numerous skills. He is able to work in different parts of that company and as a result, is more productive and is considered as a high-respected worker in that company which this productivity leads him to a fast progress and becoming a successful person in his life.
In conclusion, though some people have this idea that for be succeed in the future, we should focus on learning only one skill, I am, and always will be one of those people who believes that people who have learned many type of skills are more likely to be succeed. This is because of have better chance to find a suitable job for us, and be more creative in our life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 392, Rule ID: NUMEROUS_DIFFERENT[1]
Message: Use simply 'many'.
Suggestion: many
...ds believe that people who have learned many different skills have a greater chance to be succ...
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Line 2, column 706, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “As” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...and they will be expert in their skill. As far as I am concerned I claim that peop...
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Line 5, column 216, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun type seems to be countable; consider using: 'many types'.
Suggestion: many types
...o believes that people who have learned many type of skills are more likely to be succeed...
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Line 7, column 1, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
..., and be more creative in our life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, so, thus, while, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 31.0 15.1003584229 205% => Less to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 33.0 11.0286738351 299% => Less relative clauses wanted (maybe 'which' is over used).
Pronoun: 76.0 43.0788530466 176% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 72.0 52.1666666667 138% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2556.0 1977.66487455 129% => OK
No of words: 567.0 407.700716846 139% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.50793650794 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.87972968509 4.48103885553 109% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.45294008125 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 246.0 212.727598566 116% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.433862433862 0.524837075471 83% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 824.4 618.680645161 133% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 79.7588485555 48.9658058833 163% => OK
Chars per sentence: 121.714285714 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.0 20.6045352989 131% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.38095238095 5.45110844103 80% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.40070059873 0.236089414692 170% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.119447272358 0.076458572812 156% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.13906949474 0.0737576698707 189% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.273509174434 0.150856017488 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.126438728093 0.0645574589148 196% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.3 11.7677419355 113% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.17 10.9000537634 84% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.43 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.002688172 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Write the essay in 30 minutes.
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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