It is clearly understood that in such a sophisticated world, technology has improved, and with this improvement, other computer stuff would not be deniable, and computer games are one of this stuff that nowadays is very popular between young people, especially between children. Some people believe playing computer games is not good for children, and they should not be allowed to play with them, whereas others hold exactly the opposite perspective. As far as I am concerned, banning children from playing this kind of game is not a good solution, and parents should get adapted to the change of the world. In the subsequent paragraphs, I will delve into the most outstanding reasons.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that nowadays with improving the internet, technology, and computers are going to be very difficult to ban children from the computer, also they can access to the computer easily in many places, and if their parents do not allow them to use this stuff, they go there and use them anyway. So is much better they be allowed to use the computer, and play games with it under the supervision of their parents. For example, my friend parent never allowed her to use the computer, and play with it, and I remember she become very angry about it and she thinks her parent does not love her, and after a while, she start some bad relationship only because she does not like her parents, and a little problem in the childhood become a big problem in the future.
Another reason which should be taken into consideration is that all the computer games are not useless, and some of them can be good for children and help them in their studies. I think it is very proper to tell another example of my life. When I was a child, I had many problems in mathematics, and I did not like it at all. After a while, my teacher introduced me to a computer game that was a scientific game, and I enjoyed playing it. After a while result of that activity was amazing, I loved to solve mathematics puzzles, and had a great number in that class, actually, after that I never had a problem with math, and I liked it very much. Computer games are not always useless and I believe monitoring children can be very good, and useful for them.
To put it briefly, if one weighs the merits and demerits of the aforementioned statement, one soon realizes that whole the world is changing, and if everyone does not follow this path, the future of that society gets hurt, Maybe play a computer game do not see series for most of the people, but actually, it is an important issue and it should be taken to the consideration. In fact, there is a myriad of other reasons, supporting the above statement, which could be mentioned but are not embraced due to the dearth of time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 652, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'starts'.
Suggestion: starts
...es not love her, and after a while, she start some bad relationship only because she ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, anyway, briefly, but, first, if, may, so, whereas, while, for example, i think, in fact, kind of
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 29.0 15.1003584229 192% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 26.0 13.8261648746 188% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2277.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 497.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.5814889336 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.57360660696 2.67179642975 96% => OK
Unique words: 232.0 212.727598566 109% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.466800804829 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 719.1 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 19.0 1.86738351254 1017% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 99.2222197337 48.9658058833 203% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 151.8 100.406767564 151% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.1333333333 20.6045352989 161% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.46666666667 5.45110844103 137% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.356324525232 0.236089414692 151% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.1250908872 0.076458572812 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0875256339561 0.0737576698707 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.216801440218 0.150856017488 144% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0221921554634 0.0645574589148 34% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.7 11.7677419355 142% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 54.9 58.1214874552 94% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.8 10.1575268817 136% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.88 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.04 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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