Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Practice and hard work are more important to an athlete's success than natural ability and talent. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Innate abilities to excel do not always guarantee success. It is important to put in our blood and sweat towards our goal, so as to achieve it. I believe this is applicable to all the different spheres of life. Hence, I agree with the statement that for an athlete to be successful, practice and hardwork as important as natural ability and talent, if not more. I would like to substantiate this in this passage.
Take, for example, Mahendra Singh Dhoni, former captain of the Indian Cricket Team. His path to fame was littered with obstacles, much like others around him. Though immensely talented, he constantly struggled and fought tooth and nail to finally be able to showcase his talent to the world. He even had a short stint in the railways department so that he could become a part of the Railways Cricket Team. Everybody is talented in something or the other. It is our choice to be determined, persevere and work hard that helps us broadcast it for the rest of the planet to recognize and cherish. MSD's story is a classic example of the above statement.
Another reason practice and hard work are very important for an athlete is the competition in today's world. We find such a large number of people working towards joining the same national teams, etcetera. The top of the world is a small place, not everybody can get there. Practice and hard work help us hone our skills and help us constantly upgrade ourselves to keep in pace with today's constantly changing world. Putting in such effort also helps us gain an edge over our peers, and nudges us a closer to the destination, step by step. For an athlete, it would help them stay fit and healthy and devise new strategies to up their game.
Success is not a goal. It is a process. It doesn't end with us reaching the top rather, it goes on and on, for us to always stay there. Every athlete must realize that there is enough talent in the world to oust them from their path of success. It takes hard work and practice to show the world why you and your talent are worth its attention.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use simply 'to'
Suggestion: to
...n our blood and sweat towards our goal, so as to achieve it. I believe this is applicabl...
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Line 2, column 325, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'railways'' or 'railway's'?
Suggestion: railways'; railway's
...world. He even had a short stint in the railways department so that he could become a pa...
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Line 3, column 121, Rule ID: LARGE_NUMBER_OF[1]
Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...mpetition in todays world. We find such a large number of people working towards joining the same...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: doesn't
...cess is not a goal. It is a process. It doesnt end with us reaching the top rather, it...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, finally, hence, if, so, as to, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 46.0 43.0788530466 107% => OK
Preposition: 48.0 52.1666666667 92% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1682.0 1977.66487455 85% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.53369272237 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43552737183 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 204.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.549865229111 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 520.2 618.680645161 84% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 0.0 4.94265232975 0% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 35.991439856 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 73.1304347826 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.1304347826 20.6045352989 78% => OK
Discourse Markers: 2.08695652174 5.45110844103 38% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 18.0 11.8709677419 152% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.252878592398 0.236089414692 107% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0676447172175 0.076458572812 88% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0886048545917 0.0737576698707 120% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154537214853 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0604682255952 0.0645574589148 94% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.0 11.7677419355 68% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.49 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 72.0 86.8835125448 83% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 7.0 10.247311828 68% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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