On Balmer Island, where mopeds serve as a popular form of transportation, the population increases to 100,000 during the summer months. To reduce the number of accidents involving mopeds and pedestrians, the town council of Balmer Island should limit the number of mopeds rented by the island's moped rental companies from 50 per day to 25 per day during the summer season. By limiting the number of rentals, the town council will attain the 50 percent annual reduction in moped accidents that was achieved last year on the neighboring island of Seaville, when Seaville's town council enforced similar limits on moped rentals.
The town council of Balmer Island have suggested that the islands' moped rental companies limit the moped rentals to 25 per day during the summer season in order to reduce the number of moped accidents on the island. The above conclusion was arrived upon considering the spike in population during the summer and keeping in mind the example of Seaville, where similar restrictions on moped rentals lead to a reduction in the number of annual moped accidents . The above suggestion needs to be reconsidered based on its ability to answer three questions.
First of all, are Balmer Island and Seaville comparable? It is possible that the conditions of the roads on the two islands are vastly different, with Balmer Island having rough and broken roads in comparision with the smooth roads of Seaville. it might also be possible that the traffic rules in Balmer Island are not as stringent as those that are in place in Seaville. if either,of the above scenarios turn out to be true, then the given argument is significantly weakened.
Secondly, does and increase in population lead to a concomitant increase in moped accidents? It is possible that not all belonging to this increased population may choose to use a moped as their mode of transport. By making a claim that an increased population results in an increase in moped accidents, the author fails to acknowledge the availability of alternate forms of transport that the people may choose from. Such presence of alternate modes of transport reduces the strength of the argument.
Thirdly, is there any solid evidence that the decrease in annual moped accidents in Seaville were a result of the restrictions imposed on moped rentals in the summer season? are the summer months the times during which the number of accidents were significantly lower? it is possible that the number of accidents were lower during some other time of the year and that the limits imposed on moped rentals were ineffective, as the author states that a 50 percent drop in the annual moped accidents was observed. if this were true, then is provides evidence that the suggested plan may not be as effective as the author assumes it to be.
To conclude, the author needs to furnish stronger evidences and arguments to back his/her claims and address the aforementioned questions, in order to substantiate his/her proposal.
Comments
Essay evaluation report
Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 4.5 out of 6
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 0 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 12 15
No. of Words: 396 350
No. of Characters: 1925 1500
No. of Different Words: 172 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 4.461 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.861 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.676 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 144 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 97 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 75 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 49 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 33 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 23.134 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.583 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.369 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.667 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.126 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 5 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 135, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
... the moped rentals to 25 per day during the summer season in order to reduce the number of moped ...
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Line 1, column 457, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
... in the number of annual moped accidents . The above suggestion needs to be recons...
^^
Line 1, column 460, Rule ID: ENGLISH_WORD_REPEAT_BEGINNING_RULE
Message: Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Reword the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
... the number of annual moped accidents . The above suggestion needs to be reconsider...
^^^
Line 3, column 246, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
...sion with the smooth roads of Seaville. it might also be possible that the traffic...
^^
Line 3, column 373, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...as those that are in place in Seaville. if either,of the above scenarios turn out ...
^^
Line 3, column 382, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , of
...that are in place in Seaville. if either,of the above scenarios turn out to be true...
^^^
Line 7, column 156, Rule ID: THE_FALL_SEASON[1]
Message: Use simply 'summer'.
Suggestion: summer
...estrictions imposed on moped rentals in the summer season? are the summer months the times during...
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Line 7, column 175, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Are
... on moped rentals in the summer season? are the summer months the times during whic...
^^^
Line 7, column 270, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: It
... of accidents were significantly lower? it is possible that the number of accident...
^^
Line 7, column 511, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: If
...he annual moped accidents was observed. if this were true, then is provides eviden...
^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, first, if, may, second, secondly, so, then, third, thirdly, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 19.6327345309 117% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 12.9520958084 31% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 11.1786427146 63% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 13.6137724551 103% => OK
Pronoun: 26.0 28.8173652695 90% => OK
Preposition: 70.0 55.5748502994 126% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 16.3942115768 67% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1971.0 2260.96107784 87% => OK
No of words: 393.0 441.139720559 89% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.01526717557 5.12650576532 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45244063426 4.56307096286 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.75866375639 2.78398813304 99% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 204.123752495 88% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.458015267176 0.468620217663 98% => OK
syllable_count: 624.6 705.55239521 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.59920159681 100% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 4.0 4.96107784431 81% => OK
Article: 5.0 8.76447105788 57% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 2.70958083832 111% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.67365269461 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.22255489022 118% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 19.7664670659 81% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 22.8473053892 105% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.8351307057 57.8364921388 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.1875 119.503703932 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.5625 23.324526521 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.875 5.70786347227 85% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 5.15768463074 97% => OK
Language errors: 10.0 5.25449101796 190% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 8.20758483034 61% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 6.88822355289 131% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.67664670659 43% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.381187484584 0.218282227539 175% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.121680382778 0.0743258471296 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.111166581659 0.0701772020484 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181140136352 0.128457276422 141% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.125105340687 0.0628817314937 199% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.5 14.3799401198 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 48.3550499002 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 7.1628742515 123% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 12.197005988 104% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 12.5979740519 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.32208582834 100% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 98.500998004 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 12.3882235529 113% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 11.1389221557 104% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 11.9071856287 109% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 66.67 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 4.0 Out of 6
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