Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Society represents a big part of our lives. It influences our surroundings and behaviors from early stages of every person's life. Some people I believe surely that they support the idea that the rules implemented by the society are too strict for the young generation; others would disagree. In my view, the disciplinarian rules the society of today is very severe for children or adolescents for two essential reasons.
First, the main reason is that we witness a decrease of creativity and imagination in adults' livelihood. Following the rules and discipline by the letter in the early stage of the young people will hinder their intellectual ability and skills. This will have a repercussion on their adult life, especially the professional life when they encounter problems and they lack the creativity to handle them effectively. For example, in my primary school days I had a strict and serious teacher. It was my first day at the school and the first task I had is a punishment one not because I was a naughty pupil but for the reason that I did not know the alphabets. So, he screamed with rage and furious in my face and intimidate me in front of all the class. This shocking souvenir created a pupil with less confidence and self-esteem even after years I always had problems to engage and express my inner-mind by interacting inside about debatable topics because I wanted to play safely and follow the rules. As you can see, too much strict discipline decimate the creativity and the engagement of the mind.
Second, the other reason is that the increase in the level of obedience rises the chances of getting multiple mental anomalies. Obeying the strict rules, it is hard chore for the children and teenagers to execute tasks in this manner because they do them reluctantly and this latter creates inside them a bad feeling and sorrow. For instance, my friend who was raised by his uncle because his parents died in a car accident. His grandparents are vigorously strict on him, not only by the point of school matters but also in what they wear and where and when playing even during summer vacations. He did not enjoy his childhood as any other normal kid in his age. He felt alone and slowly became depressed and gradually he incorporated this attitude in his character and adopted it until he became a grown-up and started to turn to this depression crisis to suicide attempts. This experience taught that strictness is never a solution to rise a correct and courteous young children.
In sum, though some may oppose the idea, I believe that the society have unimaginable expectations from young people by making them follow certain absurd and none sense rules. Not only will decrease their creativity and inhibit their imagination from early stages but also it increases their chances of getting sever and harmful mentally diseases. Societies should take care by introducing more pedagogical methods that include harmony and happiness.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 117, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'persons'' or 'person's'?
Suggestion: persons'; person's
...nd behaviors from early stages of every persons life. Some people I believe surely that...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, for example, for instance, in my view
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 31.0 13.8261648746 224% => Less conjunction wanted
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 65.0 43.0788530466 151% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2464.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 500.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.928 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72870804502 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69718075034 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 269.0 212.727598566 126% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 777.6 618.680645161 126% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.9211836287 48.9658058833 104% => OK
Chars per sentence: 112.0 100.406767564 112% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.7272727273 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.45454545455 5.45110844103 63% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.178353871135 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0496218407194 0.076458572812 65% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.05364866459 0.0737576698707 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.108001901508 0.150856017488 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0390328044604 0.0645574589148 60% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 49.15 58.1214874552 85% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.9 10.1575268817 117% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.68 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 86.8835125448 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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