Education is an important part of our lives. Through education, people thrive and prosper in the future. Parents are always putting the education of their children first. That said, some people espouse the idea that money should be an incentive for children whenever they obtain good grades at school; others disagree. Though both are beneficial to some degree, I believe that the most rational and important idea is not to reward kids with money whenever they achieve good results in their education for two essential reasons.
First, handling money to children as an incentive would make them less motivated for the long term. Parents who tend to give their children a specific amount of money in every occasion of high grades contribute to the increase of their children desire to want more and more money. In the beginning, it would be a good and small amount but with the time it would never be enough, and kids would want more to satisfy that urge inside them. At some point, the parent would not be able to offer more, which will induce a decrease in the motivation of the children in terms of the passion toward their own studies. As you can see through this example, giving money to school-age children each time they obtain a high grade is not going to have any beneficial long-term impact.
Second, money will distort the notion of education. When parents give their children money, it will create and develop in the minds of children a non-patience attitude. Children would become more inclined to the reaction of having money quickly whenever they study well. The money will give to the children the misinterpretation of their main goal in school and why they are doing it in the first place. Youngsters will become more focus on money rather than enrich their minds with culture and education, which is the greatest asset in a society. Through this reasoning, you may notice the danger of giving money to children and what may result in the future when they become blinded by money.
In sum, even giving money to children as a reward might be considered for some as a boost for their children to maintain the good result, I do not support it because of the bigger issues that may come out from it. Not only will it distort the notion of education, but also it will damage the motivation of the kids toward their studies. Parents should not give money every time they show progress at school, but they rather enlighten them about their main goals at school.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, well, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 20.0 9.8082437276 204% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 60.0 52.1666666667 115% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2049.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 431.0 407.700716846 106% => OK
Chars per words: 4.75406032483 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55637350225 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.337872263 2.67179642975 88% => OK
Unique words: 197.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.457076566125 0.524837075471 87% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 623.7 618.680645161 101% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 48.3821353904 48.9658058833 99% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.842105263 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.6842105263 20.6045352989 110% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.31578947368 5.45110844103 61% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.416317465971 0.236089414692 176% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132961664186 0.076458572812 174% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0926585105566 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.272854883002 0.150856017488 181% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0214507875078 0.0645574589148 33% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.57 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.26 8.01818996416 91% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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