How much freedom the young people should have in the societies has always been a noteworthy matter when it comes to talking about the advent of the democracy in societies. There are a plethora of people who contend that in today's modern era, the rules are more strict for young people compared to the past. Others disagree. I, to a great extent, repudiate the first perspective as it seems irrational. In what follows, I will attempt to clarify the reasons in support of my viewpoint in detail.
To commence with, a most imperative reason comes to mind is that the grows of democracy in wide variety of field. It is conspicuous that as time goes by, the democracy become more valuable and the governments try to set more democracy in different societies. Let me take you back to a few years ago when people, specifically women, had lots of restriction in different countries. For example in some arabic countries, the women did not allow to have driving license! But nowadays, the liberalism and democracy have been grown more and some ridiculous rules get less stricted. Considering different examples, it is clear that the young people have more freedom in these days.
Another exquisite point to be mentioned is that the study that has been done recently in our university. This study gets high emphasis on the reaction of the people in my country on the different rules for the 30 years ago. According to this research, most of the people believe that the rules are not as much strict as the before. In the past, actually after the revolotion in Iran, there are some strict rules about the different things but recently, because of the growing democracy and increasing the information of people by using the social media, most of them had some trys to change the rules and as a matter of fact, they were successful! The more they know about the freedom, the more gain can get by their protest. Therefore, the whole of this study in my country can show that the rules are not as strict as they were in the past.
To wrap it all up, taking all the aforementioned ideas into consideration, we may draw the conclusion that not only is the grows of democracy can help the young people to follow less strict rules but also as they are more informed in comparison to the past, they tried during these years and have to follow fewer rules.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, so, therefore, for example, talking about, as a matter of fact, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 34.0 43.0788530466 79% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1931.0 1977.66487455 98% => OK
No of words: 414.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.66425120773 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51076378781 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.53283992181 2.67179642975 95% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.480676328502 0.524837075471 92% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 610.2 618.680645161 99% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 8.0 3.08781362007 259% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 89.3393941313 48.9658058833 182% => OK
Chars per sentence: 128.733333333 100.406767564 128% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.6 20.6045352989 134% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.86666666667 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.190724575741 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0595880640444 0.076458572812 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0473148901535 0.0737576698707 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.120734481095 0.150856017488 80% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0321532081479 0.0645574589148 50% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.3 11.7677419355 122% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.53 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.6 10.1575268817 124% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.07 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 81.0 86.8835125448 93% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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