Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people think that the rules for young people to follow these days are too strict, while others think that they are not. Based on my personal experience, I agree with the statement. That is, I believe that most regulations on young people are too harsh.
First, adults should care about young people's mental health, and a myriad of young people nowadays suffer from several mental illnesses, such as depression and insomnia. Thus, it is evident that regulation on young people might be too strict. Take me as an example. When I was studying in high-school, my school established tons of studying regulations, such as disallowing us to join art clubs, not allowing students to practice instruments after classes, and so on. Consequently, lots of my classmates, including me, become extremely depressed because we cannot do what we want to do. Nevertheless, my parents live in a period of time where everyone is liberal and open minded. Consequently, nearly everyone in their generation has an extremely positive personality.
Secondly, from time to time, generation gap is another key factor that makes young people not willing to obey rules. In other words, several policies might seem outdated, and according to modern standard, some rules are indeed too hard to follow. For instance, the average number of teacher per school in my country rises within three decades. Therefore, if teachers still enacted policies for young people that are too hard to obey, such as requiring students to greet to their teacher spontaneously whenever they meet them on the corridor. Then, even the most submissive student will think that these rules are too difficult to agree upon, because they might say "good evening, Teacher" for more that 100 times a day in school. Nonetheless, thirty years ago, there are only few teacher in a single school, so this requirement is quite reasonable in the past.
Last but not least, modern people care more about freedom than politeness. That is, if young people discover that some requirements might compromise their fundamental freedom, they might choose to not participate in the protocol. Take my brother as an example. My brother's school enacted several rules that restrict students' liberty, such as not allowing people to have a relationship with others, joining a club, bringing food to school, and so on. As a result, many students in his school, including him, feel that their basic freedom guaranteed by the constitution is severely damaged. Thus, they become recalcitrant and not willing to obey the school rules. Yet, in the past, most people are extremely polite toward the elderly. Accordingly, if teachers passed regulations that limit their liberty, they might choose to tolerate them instead.
In conclusion, I maintain that regulations on young people nowadays are too strict, this is due to the generation gap and freedom. Moreover, the worsening mental status of the youth is another convincing evidence.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 623, Rule ID: PERIOD_OF_TIME[1]
Message: Use simply 'period'.
Suggestion: period
... do. Nevertheless, my parents live in a period of time where everyone is liberal and open mind...
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Line 5, column 787, Rule ID: MANY_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun teacher seems to be countable; consider using: 'few teachers'.
Suggestion: few teachers
...eless, thirty years ago, there are only few teacher in a single school, so this requirement...
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Line 5, column 791, Rule ID: THERE_RE_MANY[3]
Message: Possible agreement error. Did you mean 'teachers'?
Suggestion: teachers
...s, thirty years ago, there are only few teacher in a single school, so this requirement...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, consequently, first, if, moreover, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, thus, while, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 17.0 11.0286738351 154% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2495.0 1977.66487455 126% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 5.19791666667 4.8611393121 107% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.76058490053 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 251.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522916666667 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 757.8 618.680645161 122% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 49.1082158493 48.9658058833 100% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.9615384615 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.4615384615 20.6045352989 90% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.84615384615 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.195531882499 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0558501574129 0.076458572812 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0572464534771 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.132753686621 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0747274272671 0.0645574589148 116% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 53.21 58.1214874552 92% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.88 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 110.0 86.8835125448 127% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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