By and large, it is established beyond doubt that rules of each society are of paramount importance to lead them through prosperity. Vividly, these rules have significant impacts on youngsters lives. There has been no shortage of debates among scholars on whether societies expect young people to follow too strict rules or their strictness pales in comparison to being reasonable. As for this writer's opinion, I subscribe to the latter idea. In what follows, I will delve into the most excellent reasons to substantiate my viewpoint.
The first compelling reason corroborating my stance in this subject is that societies' expectations do not interfere with young people's fundamental rights. To be more specific, youth are free to perform the activities that they desire in order to lead a joyful life. Even though they may limit young people's choice of activities, laws do not invade their inviolable rights. Despite the fact that some of these rules did not exist in the past, they are beneficial for people, especially the young ones. By way of illustration, the use of alcohols is prohibited for individuals lower than 21. However, this does not prevent them from holding parties and having fun. They can do whatever they want to be happy and enjoy their lives while it does not consist of drinking alcohol. This example manifests how rules do not confine young people's essential rights.
Furthermore, most of the laws that apply to youngsters are due to the transient state of their feelings. In other words, governments set laws to keep young people safe. It is crystal clear that youngsters are inclined toward doing exciting and dangerous activities. Their feelings and age prevent them from thinking clearly by evaluating the merits and demerits of their choice. Therefore, they may do some risky activities that will jeopardize their health. It is at this point that societies' rules and expectations come in and prevent young people from doing such activities. By way of illustration, In my country, young people below the age of twenty-five are not allowed to drive. This law was set after young people had several accidents on roads. It is worth mentioning that hundreds of young people used to die in traffic collisions annually which were due to their desire to experience high speed. However, two years ago, our government did set a rule that made driving illegal for those young people. Had the authorities set this rule sooner, lots of innocent young people would have been alive by now. Hence, this example illustrates how the regulations of communities despite being strict, helps young people stay healthy.
By perusing the above paragraphs, one can infer that the rules of societies not only are not too strict for young people but also are beneficial for them. For the sake of brevity, a couple of points are worth reiterating: first, they do not interfere with youngsters' inviolable rights; secondly, they help them to stay healthy. As for this writer's advice, I vehemently urge young people to respect the laws of their society and pay heed to them. By doing so, benefiting citizens who will contribute to the prosperity of their country will not be far-fetched.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
...arison to being reasonable. As for this writers opinion, I subscribe to the latter idea...
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Line 7, column 341, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'writers'' or 'writer's'?
Suggestion: writers'; writer's
... help them to stay healthy. As for this writers advice, I vehemently urge young people ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, hence, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, therefore, while, as for, by and large, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 77.0 52.1666666667 148% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2669.0 1977.66487455 135% => OK
No of words: 528.0 407.700716846 130% => OK
Chars per words: 5.05492424242 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.79356345386 4.48103885553 107% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68785634129 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 271.0 212.727598566 127% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.513257575758 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 802.8 618.680645161 130% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 29.0 20.6003584229 141% => OK
Sentence length: 18.0 20.1344086022 89% => OK
Sentence length SD: 31.3991600727 48.9658058833 64% => OK
Chars per sentence: 92.0344827586 100.406767564 92% => OK
Words per sentence: 18.2068965517 20.6045352989 88% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55172413793 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.251218673566 0.236089414692 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0707202201792 0.076458572812 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0666857099291 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.17115205372 0.150856017488 113% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0249413350705 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 61.67 58.1214874552 106% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.01 10.9000537634 110% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.15 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 121.0 86.8835125448 139% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.2 10.0537634409 92% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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