Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Rules have an influential and tremendous impact on our lives. In fact, it is vitally important to start educating our children society standard rules and how they should follow them in order for the best results to follow suits as they are the pillars and the power that will guide our nation toward progress. However, due to the revolutionary impact of the new technology that has a spectacular breakthrough many spheres in our communities such as the innovations of smartphones or Ipads that sometimes, reflects negatively on kids' future personalities. Therefore, I totally disagree with this statement that said the rules that the kids should follow are tough because parents are unable to enter their lives and give opinions to their children like before. the explanations go as follows.
To begin with, parents eagerly seek that their children carve out the beneficial knowledge that is deemed as a lighting guide to achieve their goals. Indeed, these days, they are allowed to purchase new devices that lead to a tremendous distraction of their minds because they will tempt to employ them in an inappropriate time such as at school without paying attention to their professor' rules. For instance, instead of focusing on teachers' valuable lessons, they will play video games or check their social media such as the Facebook or Twitter which will lead to creating a toxic atmosphere not conducive to acquiring knowledge. Therefore, they are sway to do whatever they want to do without any restriction. Consequently, kids have their own lives these days, they do not care what their teachers or guardian say.
Second, televisions in this modern life are filled with violence and illusion that may cause a bad impact on children moralities and behaviors which will, in turn, affect negatively their attitude toward the social norms and rules of our societies. In fact, they squander most of their leisure time watching movies and violent programs. For example, I feel that when I was twelve years old, I was so obedient and not stubborn to hear advice from my parents or my teachers. However, after five years, I began to admire an idol I watched by tv and such a passion massed unethical and bad attitude of the actors that led twist my view of life and created of me a selfish person unable to follow the rules like before. In conclusion, due to what accompanied the tv, children not keep the rules in their mind, but, instead, they have a tendency to follow celebrities.
To sum up, the government should have the obligation to legislate rules to prevent the children having access to a vast array of movies or the new innovations until they become more mature because this will lead tribble consequences on their demeanor.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, may, second, so, therefore, for example, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, in fact, such as, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 58.0 43.0788530466 135% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 66.0 52.1666666667 127% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2281.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 460.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 4.95869565217 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6311565067 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67379904317 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 241.0 212.727598566 113% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.523913043478 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 700.2 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 28.0 20.1344086022 139% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 76.1798601584 48.9658058833 156% => OK
Chars per sentence: 142.5625 100.406767564 142% => OK
Words per sentence: 28.75 20.6045352989 140% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.5 5.45110844103 174% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0976791270857 0.236089414692 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0358962906478 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0403095796414 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0632778416409 0.150856017488 42% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0455435829015 0.0645574589148 71% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.52 58.1214874552 89% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.08 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.01 8.01818996416 112% => OK
difficult_words: 116.0 86.8835125448 134% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 13.2 10.0537634409 131% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 88.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.5 Out of 30
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