Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Rules are the building blocks of a society and they could either make an environment a good place or a bad place to live. There is a controversial debate among policymakers whether rules are easy to follow or not. In this regard, while many people hold the opinion that rules are very firm for juveniles, others stand on the other side of the continuum, holding the view that they are not very hard to follow. As far as I am concerned, I am inclined to the former group of people. In what follows, I will explain the most crucial reasons to substantiate my viewpoint.
It is worth bearing in mind from a sociological standpoint that society today is emerging; as a result, people who live in this society–including younger ones– react to this emergence. George Akerlof–A famous sociologist who won the Noble price in medical science– once said, "We live in an emerging era that everything changes on a daily basis." To make things crystal clear, an example of my own life can shed light on how rules are not strict anymore. I have a relative who used to respect his parents and do anything they said; at the passage of time, he is not as respectful as he used to be. Not only he does not obey the order of his father but he also demands a lot of things from his father.
Furthermore, another compelling reason which supports my stance on this subject is that social media and the internet make young people more liberal. This stance is no longer holds true because studies have revealed that there is a significant correlation between the internet penetration rate and the number of disobeyed teenagers. In this vein, a survey conducted by a group of social scientists at Istanbul University has shown that the more the number of Instagram and Facebook users in a city, the less satisfaction of parents. This study mentions disobeyed teenagers as one the main reason for the parents' dissatisfaction. Had young people not access to social media, the would have been more respectful to the rules.
In conclusion, having considered all the above-mentioned arguments, reasons, and examples into account, I do believe that in the last decade rules have changed dramatically in order to make life easier for young people. There are a couple of reasons which worth reiterating: first, the fast trend of emergence in our society makes rules to change . second, social media makes young people more liberal.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, second, so, while, in conclusion, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2016.0 1977.66487455 102% => OK
No of words: 415.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 4.8578313253 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51348521516 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82665733314 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.55421686747 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 640.8 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.9916372488 48.9658058833 123% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.588235294 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4117647059 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.70588235294 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185668103976 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0549878937631 0.076458572812 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.034857085904 0.0737576698707 47% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.105681152418 0.150856017488 70% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0242162633444 0.0645574589148 38% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.71 8.01818996416 109% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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